Your face keeps the stars from falling and gives the moon its light I’m lost in your essence; your eyes capture me and pull me to you A mixture of feelings fill me, mostly awe standing in front of your sight Watching you loosing track of time, I fall into another world with you The sun chases away the clouds into the red horizon Their silver shapes all disappearing and light fills the darkness I am too weak to go to you, to afraid ask of you my deepest question Who am I to ask for your hand, I’m but an insecure man lost in loneliness Colors merge and mix in the sky off in the distance, painting a portrait behind you A smile so warm it parts the cool morning air with its glow, and nothing is what it seems With every step I take echoing a past pain, a past love, how do I break through? To anyone that is anything less than a King, you are but a fool’s deepest dream There is a new day for every mistake, a new love for every heart break You’re so close I can reach out to touch you, I just have to believe One day my scares will wash away into the sea of time, never will I look back But as dreams are born in the span of an instant, they take a lifetime to achieve ____________________- I wrote this about a girl I feel very deeply for, but I haven’t asked her out besides casual un bf-gf dates, because of how my last relationship was ruined, I don’t want to wind up hating someone I feel so much for, I want this feeling to last, should I... 1. Give her the poem, but don’t tell her it’s about her 2. Give it to and say its is written about her 3. Don’t give it, because quite frankly its crap 4. Don’t give it, just keep the relationship the way it is ____ I am struggling trying to decide to ask her out and what not, what do you guys think of the poem?
Very good man! But I'd ask the girl out before reciting any poetry to her,although thats just my opinion
I wouldnt resite it to her, i plan on giving it to her like a christmas gift. Thanks for the comment, anymore?
I personally would ask her out before giving her your poem, but that's just me. I would feel a lot more comfortable knowing that she felt the same way about me before i gave her a poem i wrote for her. It could be very awkward for the both of you if she doesn't feel what you feel for her. Although, if you feel comfortable giving her your poem to break the barrier or something like that, then go ahead, it's just how you feel comfortable really, and how you think she will react. After all, i don't know her and she may be gald about the poem. It's your decision. Good luck.
actually, i know for a fact she does feel that way, the only reason this hasnt gone anyware is because of me, my fear of the past
actually, i know for a fact she does feel that way, the only reason this hasnt gone anyware is because of me, my fear of the past [/b][/quote] Then go ahead, its a cool poem sickcycle, she will love it Good luck!!
Just a few typos: 01. The second line should say "towards you". 02. On the fourth line, "losing" is mispelt. I'm sure the girl you speak of wouldn't be so interested in such flaws, but I always have an urge to speak out about stuff like this ...