A few of my best

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    RiffRockerX

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    I have about 13 or 14 poems that are copyrighted at poetry.com but i've decided to share a few with everyone here. I will choose some of my best and see what you all think. Here goes.

    "The Sun is Fast Asleep"

    Wandering on this moonlight trail.
    The stars play games in the sky.
    With swift back and forth movements.
    The moon stands proudly on his darkened canvas.
    The Sun is fast asleep, awaiting the coming dawn.
    Still I hear the silent, melliflous ballad.
    Of your voice, so rich with heart.
    The shades of dark and light seem to resemble your face.
    Now i contemplate of you, my heart's desire.
    Fueling my imagination are the endless fields of luminance.
    Across the painted horizon peeks the thought of day.
    But for now the sun is fast asleep.

    "Dearly Beloved"

    Dearly beloved, I'll write to you today
    To tell you of my lifetime of fearing what you'll say
    A heart of endless wonders, a mind of endless depth
    If only i knew what was right i'd make the steady step
    To live my life all over, to make the slightest change
    Would never be the same dear, would never be the same
    Dearly beloved, I'll write to you this year
    To warn you of the dangers, to save you from your fears
    Keep me in your mind when this useless fight is dead
    I'll ask you of your journeys and live these days ahead
    Take the upper hand now, I'll leave the choice to choose
    Let me be the good guy, I'll never let you lose
    Confusion bites the heels, of everyone indeed
    But never let it grow there, for all it brings is greed
    Dearly beloved, I wanted you to know
    I cant go on this way, I have to let it show
    Before my heart has changed and before my mind is swayed
    I must cast off this burden that I myself have laid

    "Yesterday's Gone"

    Eyes closed tight, Ears held closed
    Evil in your mind, imposed
    Steering you in paths astray
    This can't wait another day
    I won't let you let me down
    Take my hand and you won't drown
    I'll be here just look my way
    Pretend It's just like yesterday
    I can see it in your eyes
    Hidden under your dark disguise
    Shed the black and embrace the light
    Let this go and end the fight

    If you have any feedback then please post, I would appreciate it greatly. Thanks
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    They're all good written poems.
     
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    sickcycle

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    They are all good, but the first is the best, better wording and I could really imagine the the scene and feel. wonderdful and keep writing and posting on here!
     

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