A Dream Like You

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    Michael

    Michael Well-Known Member

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    Just Wrote this, can you please tell me what you think.

    A Dream Like You

    Spoken
    I dreamed of a night like this, a night of passion and beauty like no other.
    A dream world of joyful compassion and truth
    This is how it goes…

    Music starts to fade in

    Chorus
    Maybe tonight
    That lover could be, that lover, could be you.
    Stars burning bright, our passions burning high
    An eternal force, never to be fought
    Let it free to fly away as it will

    5 Second Interval

    Verse 1
    Our love set free, our passion burning high among the stars
    Our fate, our lives in the hands of forces we cannot control
    A night like no other, a night, a night in mid October.
    The leafs gently falling to the soles of our shoes
    The slow, slow walk home after a night of love and compassion

    Chorus
    Maybe tonight
    That lover could be, that lover, could be you.
    Stars burning bright, our passions burning high
    An eternal force, never to be fought
    Let it free to fly away as it will

    5 Second Interval

    Verse 2
    The key to my heart, in your hands, your will defines all
    The music to my heart, written by fate, you and myself
    Our melody, our passion in the waves of music and eternal balance
    Our lives, lived as one, our true dreams realised
    Our love, our passions as one, one which links all
    Your life, my truest most desire, my life long dream

    Chorus
    Maybe tonight
    That lover could be, that lover, could be you.
    Stars burning bright, our passions burning high
    An eternal force, never to be fought
    Let it free to fly away as it will

    Chorus
    Maybe tonight
    That lover could be, that lover, could be you.
    Stars burning bright, our passions burning high
    An eternal force, never to be fought
    Let it free to fly away as it will

    Verse 3
    Somewhere deep in my heart, my deep feelings lie
    My true passions speak their mind, my dreams lie waiting
    My face could never lie, to you my dear I am only true
    Dreaming of a night with you, a night with us and the stars
    The millions of stars and planets, which watch our fate
    You are my fate, you are my obsession
    My only, one reason for living.

    5 Second Interval

    Chorus
    Maybe tonight
    That lover could be, that lover, could be you.
    Stars burning bright, our passions burning high
    An eternal force, never to be fought
    Let it free to fly away as it will

    Fades Slowly Out

    Spoken
    You are my passion, my true fate, my existence

    By Michael James Kennedy Findlay
     
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    esaul17

    esaul17 antichrist

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    Nice job. Relatable too. Good rhymes and long lines. I liked it.
     
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    Michael

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    Again Thank You, Kind Sir.
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    Pretty good, i couldn't quite catch the tune of it though. The only line that i didn't like was "a night in mid October."

    It just seemed really out of place, as if you put it there cause you couldn't think of anything else.
    Still a good job, keep it up.
     
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    Michael

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    Thanks for the comments. I do try, onlyu reall just began writing songs. Switched from poetry.
     

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