"If You Were Here"

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    Will

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    "If You Were Here"

    I didn't sleep at all last night
    Instead I read by candlelight
    All of the letters you had sent
    Recounting all the nights we spent
    I wonder often where they've gone
    All disappearing into dawn
    And each seemed shorter than the last
    Now I sit thinking of nights past

    I can't help but laugh at your words
    And even if I feel absurd
    I know you'd want me to smile bright
    If you were here with me tonight

    The sun is peaking through the clouds
    Pushing past all its snow-white shrouds
    It warms my room like you were there
    And shining off your auburn hair
    I often wonder where you are
    If you still shine like my bright star
    This night was shorter than the last
    Because I thought about our past

    I can't help but laugh at the thought
    That you're the one I almost caught
    I know you'd tell me to move on
    If you were here, but now you're gone

    The morning spills into the day
    And I've got nothing left to say
    I had you once, what's done is done
    Now you're the voice that I run from
    I often wonder if you know
    That you're the reason that I've grown
    Last night was shorter than the last
    I finally put aside our past

    I can't help but laugh at myself
    I'll put these thoughts back on the shelf
    I know you'd laugh, I know you'd cry
    If you were here with me tonight
     
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    This is an awesome poem Will!

    If only other people could write this good... :whistling
     
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    Thanks. :lol:
     
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    I don't know who you're thinking about - I was talking about myself... :lol:
     
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    Well done Will.
     
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    Thanks, Jen. :)
     
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    You're welcome. I also wish I could write like that.
     
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    You're welcome. I also wish I could write like that.
     
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    What the hell. sorry Mods.
     
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    Will

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    The site just went wonky for me, too. :lol: It's not your fault. Thanks again. :)
     
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    Even though the rhyming scheme happens a lot, it works. You can never rhyme TOO much if you make it work, unlike random words, just so you can rhyme for rhyme's sake (Which is NOT what you have done here)

    I personally loved this one.

    I often wonder if you know
    That you're the reason that I've grown
    Last night was shorter than the last
    I finally put aside our past
     
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    Great! very awesome. I feel this.
     
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    Thanks, guys. :)
     

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