Ignorance is Treason

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    Gloomy Mushroom

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    You just don't know how I feel
    I keep telling myself that this can't be happening for real
    You're always home for the evening meal
    It's time for me to say something to you

    [chorus]
    I just don't know that in the corner of my heart
    Where you pulled us apart
    Your ignorance will be treason
    You're just not that pleasing
    It's the wrong season
    For me to act the way the way I do
    But I do know that your ignorance is treason

    I don't know who told you that it was okay
    To act the way that you did towards me today
    You said "hello" slipped off your shoes and fell asleep
    But it's my turn to take this emotional leap

    Your mama told me before
    That I oughta have thrown you out the door
    Before you got the chance to break my heart
    My heart's already in a million pieces away, it's apart

    [chorus]

    Your ignorance is treason
    And it is the reason
    Why I cry these tears
    It's not because of my fears

    So just walk away
    Don't come back another day
    It was nice to waste the time we had
    Go have a child with another woman, and be a dad

    My heart's already been torn
    It's been shredded and now has been worn
    Your ignorance is treason

    Your ignorance is treason
    Your ignorance is treason
    Your ignorance is treason
    Ignorance is treaon!

    (yeah!)


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    Seinfeld

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    My heart's already in a million pieces away, it's apart

    I personally thought that this line was a little cheap.
    And some rhymes seemed too forced.

    Other than that, I like the overall idea of the poem / lyric. And I did rather enjoy reading it. Maybe just a little polishing here and there, and it'd be a great piece, in my opinion.
     
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    Gloomy Mushroom

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    Thank you Seinfield :hug:
     

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