A Sad Song

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    The Emptiness Machine

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    So I tried to make a poem with a limited amount of words I wrote on a peice of paper. They were random words and then I TRIED To make something out of them... Basically I tried to make the poem about the fragileness of life.

    Life is.
    But am I?
    Do I see
    Blind in light?
    Can I greive
    A sad song ?
    What is it
    To fade away, with eyes closed?
    I will ask
    Hope I'll know
    Can I touch the distant stars?
    Can I heal?
    .... May I
    Feel for a moment?
    Escape my doom
    With eyes closed
    Does breathing -
    Free me from the dark?
    Guide me across a journey long?
    Yes.. Life is
    But am I
    Is my heart open?

    Guide me across a journey long.
    What is it. A sad song?
    May I escape my doom?
    I'll ask "Can I heal a sad song"
    But am I blind in light to fade away with eyes closed?
    Can I touch the distant stars. Hope I'll know
    Does a moment breathing free me

    Is my heart open.


    Pls C&C
     
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    Dean

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    It's not bad considering you were restricting yourself while writing it.
     
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    vasiab

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    ^
    Indeed! +reminds me of some Robert Frost+Ezra Pound poems.!
     

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