Just a new set of lyrics for a song I'm working on. Please give me some feedback on it's weak points and strong points. Thanks and enjoy "Suspicion Aroused" Sit on this tyre, Attached to this tree, Swing in time with the music, And fall for me, I'll bring the whiskey if I have to, And we'll dream of clouds and holding hands, Say "I'm so glad the sun is out" And lay back, onto the grass as the scene fades out, As my father looks out of his rotting French windows, With disapproving thoughts, And visions of his own interests... "Whoever thought a child as young as you, Could hurt their father, in such a bad way, And as you run away to accommodate your own needs, Do you ever think about me? As your mother did before you, You've given up on all that you knew, Betrayed by my own blood, body and skin, But I guess love will overpower everything." I know exactly how you feel, But I'm never gonna let a girl like her slip away, Elisa's got something about her body, And the way she writhes atypically throughout her day, But no matter what happens between her and I, I'll always be there for you, You're my father and you've raised me all my life, Now what kind of son could ever leave you? Love and laughter, extrude out from my lungs, As I notice a girl like you could love a guy like me, And my prevailing fears of rejection slide away, The sun burns the mist from my eyes so I can see, This beautiful creature staring back at me, 'Til darkness does cover this land, And our love must hide to prevent uncomfortable ends. Woah... Woah... Woah... Woah... Now, with half the whiskey gone, We're both dead to everyone, As my father watches on, Carefully caressing the barrel of his gun. I know exactly how you feel, But I'm never gonna let a girl like her slip away, Elisa's got something about her body, And the way she writhes atypically throughout her day, But no matter what happens between her and I, I'll always be there for you, You're my father and you've raised me all my life, Now what kind of son could ever leave you?