This is a little different from what is normally posted here at LPA, but I wrote this today and am curious as to what you guys think of it. I inserted some Spanish lines and I'll translate them later or whatever if you guys would like. Anyway, any feedback would be much appreciated. Thanks in advance. .:Robust Adjectives:. Glistening here Glistening... Glistening... The summer sunset Glowing pewter extravagant I gaze over the vast ocean And watch the S.S Disaster Sail into port The waves crash On the rocks below Seagulls flock Over the dreams Ecstasy fills my veins I turn over on my towel And bring her in close ¿Used me ensemble en ester passé de la alegría? Palm trees toss In the gulf stream wind Conchs whisper As grains of sand uplift And sting the our eyes An unusual cold settles Upon morphine beach Her body shivers shivers But I hold her close And this feeling expands The two of us grow together It makes me feel warm ¿Usted me ensamblará en este paseo de la alegría? Relucir aquí Relucir... Relucir... Submarine instances Liquefying the scallywags That stroll upon The sand dunes I put my hand in yours And feel us grow together I stare into her blue eyes I touch her cheek Her pink mascara runs As tears of joy Fall down her check As do I ¿Usted me ensamblará en este paseo de la alegría? The radiant rhinestone In the bright sky Finally dims out of our view I hold your body Deep into mine And feel our hearts beat Simultaneously to the others' We walk along the shoreline The waves breaking at our toes Hand and hand we go on Tonight, I'll never forget We'll be sure to do it again ¿Usted me ensamblará en este paseo de la alegría? Will you join me on this joy ride?
I like your usage of the Spanish phrase, there. You translated it with the final line, though, I believe. It makes it very unique. Good job.
Yeah, as Will says, the Spanish line brings a toutch to the song, and overall it's really like nothing else . Good work!
whoah.. nice poem/song... very descriptive which i liked cos i had a constant visual in my mind.. good work..! so the spanish in it means "will you join me on this joy ride?" eh?? its very kewl..
Thanks everyone Yes, the Spanish line that is being repeated is ''Will you take a joy ride with me'' Very good everyone! Relucir aqui was ''Glistening here'', just basically repeating the opening. But thank you. Any more comments, I'd love to hear them.
Thank You. I doubt anyone else will respond but if anyone has anything to add I'd be much delightened.
I've always had major respect for anyone who has the guts to insert spanish into thier lyrics as I believe Spanish is a very beautiful language when used in a song. Great job on these lyrics Tim, keep up the good work.