.:Robust Adjectives:.

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    Tim2

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    This is a little different from what is normally posted here at LPA, but I wrote this today and am curious as to what you guys think of it. I inserted some Spanish lines and I'll translate them later or whatever if you guys would like. Anyway, any feedback would be much appreciated. Thanks in advance.


    .:Robust Adjectives:.

    Glistening here
    Glistening...
    Glistening...

    The summer sunset
    Glowing pewter extravagant
    I gaze over the vast ocean
    And watch the S.S Disaster
    Sail into port
    The waves crash
    On the rocks below
    Seagulls flock
    Over the dreams
    Ecstasy fills my veins
    I turn over on my towel
    And bring her in close

    ¿Used me ensemble en ester passé de la alegría?

    Palm trees toss
    In the gulf stream wind
    Conchs whisper
    As grains of sand uplift
    And sting the our eyes
    An unusual cold settles
    Upon morphine beach
    Her body shivers shivers
    But I hold her close
    And this feeling expands
    The two of us grow together
    It makes me feel warm

    ¿Usted me ensamblará en este paseo de la alegría?

    Relucir aquí
    Relucir...
    Relucir...

    Submarine instances
    Liquefying the scallywags
    That stroll upon
    The sand dunes
    I put my hand in yours
    And feel us grow together
    I stare into her blue eyes
    I touch her cheek
    Her pink mascara runs
    As tears of joy
    Fall down her check
    As do I

    ¿Usted me ensamblará en este paseo de la alegría?

    The radiant rhinestone
    In the bright sky
    Finally dims out of our view
    I hold your body
    Deep into mine
    And feel our hearts beat
    Simultaneously to the others'
    We walk along the shoreline
    The waves breaking at our toes
    Hand and hand we go on
    Tonight, I'll never forget
    We'll be sure to do it again

    ¿Usted me ensamblará en este paseo de la alegría?

    Will you join me on this joy ride?
     
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    Will

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    I like your usage of the Spanish phrase, there. You translated it with the final line, though, I believe. It makes it very unique. Good job.
     
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    Anthony.

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    Yeah, as Will says, the Spanish line brings a toutch to the song, and overall it's really like nothing else :D . Good work!
     
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    whoah.. nice poem/song... very descriptive which i liked cos i had a constant visual in my mind..^_^ good work..! so the spanish in it means "will you join me on this joy ride?" eh?? its very kewl..
     
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    I really liked it. Excellent job! :)
     
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    Tim2

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    Thanks everyone ^_^

    Yes, the Spanish line that is being repeated is ''Will you take a joy ride with me'' Very good everyone!

    Relucir aqui was ''Glistening here'', just basically repeating the opening.

    But thank you. :)

    Any more comments, I'd love to hear them.
     
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    Jamie

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    Very unique. i like it alot
     
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    Great job! :D Really cool...
     
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    Its really good.
     
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    Tim2

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    Thank You. ^_^

    I doubt anyone else will respond but if anyone has anything to add I'd be much delightened.
     
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    I've always had major respect for anyone who has the guts to insert spanish into thier lyrics as I believe Spanish is a very beautiful language when used in a song. Great job on these lyrics Tim, keep up the good work. :teehee:
     
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    tahts pretty dope!
     
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    Tim2

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    :teehee:

    Thank You, very much.
     

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