This is the first poem I've written in a while. It started out as a regular poem with just the verses that I wrote, but I realized that I was using a portion of "Crawling," so I decided to use Mike's short rap from the verses in "Crawling" and use them as the chorus of my poem-turned-song. The chorus would be whispered. Read and respond. Sense of Confidence verse: I’m sitting here inside my broken mind Without a sense of confidence I’ve lost something I can never find It’s leaving me alone in suspense chorus: Without a sense of confidence I’m convinced that there’s just Too much pressure to take verse: The fear in me runs so deep inside Without a sense of confidence I’m running out of time to bide And I’m ruining my only chance chorus: Without a sense of confidence I’m convinced that there’s just Too much pressure to take verse: Frozen deep in thought here now Without a sense of confidence I need to tell her but don’t know how I’m sorry if I’m seeming dense chorus: Without a sense of confidence I’m convinced that there’s just Too much pressure to take verse: My thoughts break me down deep Without a sense of confidence I pray thee Lord my soul too keep If I die going through this mess chorus: Without a sense of confidence I’m convinced that there’s just Too much pressure to take verse: My mind is broken, so unstable Without a sense of confidence This is like a paperback fable Where you’re just left in suspense chorus: Without a sense of confidence I’m convinced that there’s just Too much pressure to take Without a sense of confidence I’m convinced that there’s just Too much pressure to take There’s just too much pressure to take...
the lyrics are really cool. but i think u shouldnt put it in order as a song. u have to many stanzas and the chorus comes in way to often i think. what u did with mikes verse is just great, i really like it. you could try to put stanzas together, or cut out some stanzas of ur song. and i personally dont like it if someone rhymes 2 words moe than 1 time, but i think thats just me.