It hurts so fucking much...I cried straight through this piece. Honestly, I want feedback... --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- It's funny how Love, it never finds the words, yet it just won't stop talking And when it's taken from us, it has everything written down but it just can't open it's mouth It's weird how Love, we say it's most divine Just to feel what it's like to die Now, medicate me, I don't care This pain I feel it will remain with me Take away my life but please, god, please Don't take hope away from me That's right, I'd rather be left young and stupid as long as I don't have to grow up to understand: What I feel is not forever No matter how tightly I have it clutched within my hands Now once more: Isn't it ironic how Love, it never finds the words, yet it just won't stop talking And when it's taken from us, it has everything written down but it just can't open it's mouth
wow i really like it pretty much expressed all my feelings and thoughts right now and the thing about finding it hard to find words for love is really true good job man and if you dont mind, i wouldnt mind the feedback returned
It's good. Very emotional. I get the feeling it's about a break up, and that love is written in your memories, but the person you loved has moved on and those words of love in your memories can't be spoken how you want them to be.
To both: Thank you. It's about a break up. or a time out. It's like this: When you're in love, you just can't shut your fucking face eventhough most of the time you're just saying "I just can't describe how beautiful you are / how much I love you" and so on. And when you're on the edge of losing all of that you know just what to say...you just can't seem to find the motivation to do so. The medicate me line is about my current condition...I'm sick and have cramps and extreme heartaches (not because of my girlfriend). I could take my painrelievers to take one pain. but I'd honestly rather be winding on the floor screaming, than sitting in the corner sobbing all day. We're not officially broken up, which is why I'd rather have my life taken and not my hope for another good healthy start after this time out. I know everyone is going to tell me "This pain will pass" and so on...But I'm just not ready to accept that quite yet...: That's right, I'd rather be left young and stupid as long as I don't have to grow up to understand: What I feel is not forever No matter how tightly I have it clutched within my hands Meaning: I know I won't love or hurt forever eventhough I'm not ready to accept it / let go which is why I'd rather be young again without ever having experienced love or anything of the sort.
Break-ups are the worst. Know exactly how you feel. It just feels like the end...but don't lose hope....
I'm sorry about what happened. I understand what you're feeling. You portrayed those emotions in your piece very well. You mixed your talent at writing with your emotions and made a great piece out of it. Great job. Hang in there.
I am hanging...on a noose...I really feel like I'm choking...this is the first time for me...how the fuck does anyone deal with this shit?...
I know exactly how you feel, I just went through a break up yesterday and the worst thing is that even though the person broke with me, I hurt him more by being cold and indifferent but the whole time I felt like there were invisible hands trying to suffocate me and taking my insides in a vice grip. What you wrote summed up what I felt. Hope things get better for you.
I've been with this boy off and on for over three years. He's cheated on me (from what i know of) twice, and kissed three other girls in the process of me trying to work things out with him. I've even given up my truest friend for him, yet after all the crap he's put me through, and everything else, I still find myself clinging on for dear life. I love him, and nothing short of that. This is my first time dealing with it, but it's not the first time with this boy. When you wrote "That's right, I'd rather be left young and stupid as long as I don't have to grow up to understand: What I feel is not forever No matter how tightly I have it clutched within my hands" I completely about broke inside while reading this. Mainly because those words are what I could never really piece together in my mind. Love never lasts forever unless love is mutual. And problems are always going to happen. But it's not worth it unless both people are willing to work at it and do what needs to be done to make things better. I'm really just rambling on about this probably, but know that you're not alone when it comes to love and loss and the pain that follows. I hope things are better by now being it's been almost a month since this was posted.
It's better now. Thank you for your concern. And I truely hope you feel better soon. I guess knowing other people endure pain that is greater or even equivelent to my own is somewhat comforting. Honestly, after what has happened, I'd rather have any of my limbs cut off than have my heart torn in two like it has been before... At least metaphorically speaking.