Killing Me Inside You make me suffer at your cost You make me feel like I am lost The struggles I go through because of you Makes me want to forget about you You hardly know me You don't even try Why won't you see You're killing me inside I can't stop these tears I don't know how I'm at an all time low And you don't even care You hardly know me You don't even try Why won't you see You're killing me inside Don't you want to love me Don't you want to make me happy If you care then show me How a father is supposed to be You hardly know me You don't even try Why won't you see You're killing me inside (2x) I know it's not great....Any comments though?
i know it IS great!! i like it alot, but it could be a tad longer good job on the lyrics tho, great flow
Thanks for the comments. Yeah, I know it should be longer but I wrote that during a 35 minute free period at school and I didn't really have a lot of time to make it longer.
Oh my god!!! You are all really good writers in here. i oculd never write like you can. That is very good
You seem to have the concept of flow locked down, good job. Everyone can make good lyrics but for them to truly stand out they need to flow inside the reader's head, and as much as I don't want to say it, that's a big problem of some of the writers on these forums. They make great lyrics...but lack any flow whatsoever in thier writings. It's good to see that you don't fall victim to that curse.