Forsaken

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    Alexis

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    I'd really appreciate some feedback on this one... Thanks :)



    would you say you loved me
    after my place has long been filled
    would you watch her smile
    and think to yourself that this is why I left
    you've forsaken me

    she's much more sweet than I ever
    could have been
    she is perfect and I am full of sin
    but do you really love her?
    is she what you dream of tonight?
    you've forsaken me
    you've forgotten me

    I would die again and again
    to show you how terrible it's been
    I believed in your touch
    but you've forsaken me
    and you've forgotten me

    she knows the truth I hide
    I left with bitter words
    but I ache to death inside
    Her laugh is that of victorious joy
    and you've forsaken me
    you've forgotten me

    I would die again and again
    to show you how terrible it's been
    I believed in your touch
    but you've forsaken me
    and you've forgotten me

    And when you kiss her goodnight
    you've turned your back to me in spite
    does it bother you if I'm not there
    can you feel the cross I bear?
    you've forsaven me
    and you've forgotten me

    I would die again and again
    to show you how terrible it's been
    I believed in your touch
    but you've forsaken me
    and you've forgotten me
     
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    Andrea

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    Wow! Very good. I loved it! :)
     
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    Alexis

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    thanks for responding :)
     
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    Gaabjuh

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    That's cool. Good work!
     
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    Alexis

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    hey thanks....
     
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    I really like it :D
     

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