Red Sky

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    Will

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    "Red Sky"

    There are times when I'm just awestruck
    Over the things you put me through
    Everything seemed great at the time
    Then I began to see "true" you
    I imagine what might have been
    Then I imagine myself bruised
    Torn apart and broken again
    By all the things you put me through

    Your eyes, they fall
    From this red sky
    Crash to the ground
    Now you watch in
    Disbelief that
    I am gone

    All this time
    You left me bleeding
    Face-down on your floor
    Tears pierce the skin
    Broken promises
    Feel like salting
    Open wounds
     
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    esaul17

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    I like it...I have to admit I thought of the Thrice song when I saw the title though :p.

    Either way, it was a good piece.
     
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    Will

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    Yeah. I've actually got no idea why I posted it. It's not anywhere near done. :lol: Plus the second and third stanzas were taken from some lyrics from a band of a friend of mine, so they're not even mine. :lol:

    Whenever I get around to it, I guess I'll post the real thing.
     
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    The Emptiness Machine

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    It's pretty good so far, it reminds me of some past relationships. I would have named it Scarlet sky though for more spazaz and what not.
     
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    Will

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    The actual title (once I get the lyrics finalized) is probably going to be "Enough Talking, Let's Get Down to Business (Shut Your Mouth, It's Time to Dance)." :lol:
     
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    The Emptiness Machine

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    That Title Is "Fucking A"
     
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    Zakrisk

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    Red Sky is more original than the one you're probably going to make it.
     
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    Arlene

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    You have potential, dear.

    Finish and post the real thing! ^_^
     
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    Daniel

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    :lol: sounds like someone's been listening to a little too much Cobra Starship to me.

    :p

    Unfinished or not, I still really like it. Can't wait to see the final version.
     

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