When heroes can't save us

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    Seinfeld

    Seinfeld We are the nobodies LPA Super Member

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    Inspired by Dušan's ''Every Superhero Sleeps Alone''.


    I'm pissed, because I had it finished and accidently deleted it...I had to write it from scratch again...if it seems incomplete, please tell me.

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    When heroes can't save us:

    We come closer than before,
    but still end up making the same mistakes
    The moment seemed perfect, almost flawless
    but your intentions have become much more noxious

    It's like I'm oblivious to you
    If you really are who I thought I knew
    I've mislead myself again, for the last time
    'cause nothing I've done feels quite right

    Corrupted, we look up to others
    Say ''hello''
    When you cling to another so-called
    'hero'

    Do you remember the last time?
    When we still felt comfort, we felt secure
    Confused, are you sincere, are you pure?
    I don't know how much of this I can endure

    Corrupted, we look up to others
    Say ''hello''
    When you cling to another so-called
    'hero'

    Don't get your hopes up, even heroes run the risk to drown
    After all, we all know:
    It's the small losses that bring a man down

    Corrupted, we look up to others
    Say ''hello''
    When you cling to another so-called
    'hero'

    Say ''hello'', say ''hello'', say...

    ''hello''​
     
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    El Muerto

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    Pffft, mine is so much better..

    J/k :D

    I like it a lot. My favourite part must be:

    So true
     
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    Seinfeld

    Seinfeld We are the nobodies LPA Super Member

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    I'm very glad you liked it. And thank you to you too, for posting what inspired this ^_^

    Those were my favorite lines too...I can't remember too well, but I believe I heard ''It's the small losses that bring a man down'' from some game before.
     
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    Harlz

    Harlz More Scared Of You Than You Are Of Me LPA Super Member

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    Nice work man, I particularly like that line.
     
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    Arhaz

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    Don't get your hopes up, even heroes run the risk to drown
    After all, we all know:
    It's the small losses that bring a man down

    my fav part...fantastic..those lines almost just bring the whole pom o life. *standing ovation*
    i thought you were inspired by dusan when i read the title. i love it when poets get inspired by one another. just coming to writers cove inspires me.
    a good job!
     
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    Seinfeld

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    Thank you very much. ^_^

    I have to say. Quite a few of you (Hellflame, esaul, you, etc.) have inspired me so many times. Not even that, you've given me goals. I really, really want to be as talented as most of you are some day. I'm not quite there yet, but when I look back at what I used to write, I'm very happy with the progress I've made, thanks to the critique and the support you guys have given me. ^_^
     

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