Of A Thousand Pins

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    The Emptiness Machine

    The Emptiness Machine Out of the abyss. LPA Über VIP

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    Of A Thousand Pins

    I lay here, in the emptines without any fear
    Even as the needles peirce, my heart it works
    The black top bleeds, liqufying all my dreams
    Darkness covers me, in the blanket of infinity
    The blood it pours, on and on in a river
    There are no gentle words, and every tear
    will fall as I shed, tears of love
    become blood that wraps around my emptiness

    In the light, The dark still finds me
    The ticking clock of a thousand pins
    pressing down into my rotting flesh
    Peeling the skin, the fear has began

    My heart it beats, as I reach for what is in front of me
    Every needle has been soaked and now my eyes are red
    The black tops gone and is now my dying bed
    Darkness infront and way behind, if I blink, I'll be swallowed alive
    All the bllod it pours onto the river of pain
    There are no gently words, insomina falls like rain
    ANd ever tear will colaspe as I shed
    Tears of love, become my emptiness

    In the light, The dark still finds me
    The ticking clock of a thousand pins
    pressing down into my rotting flesh
    Peeling the skin, the fear has began

    In the light, The dark still finds me
    (In the night, the light misses me)
    The ticking clock of a thousand pins
    Pressing down into my rotting flesh
    (The ungoing screams of infinate voices)
    peeling the skin.. Peeling.. The fear has just began

    The ticking clock of a thousand pins
    Pressing down into my rotting flesh
    Peeling the skin, the fear has began
    In the light, The dark still finds me..​
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    i love the line "In the light, The dark stiff finds me".
    It's a beautiful poem..the desperation clearly showing itself through all the blood. yet, it's kind of stiff. you have to make it a little more flexible, a lil more...wild and unbelieveable in a less gorious way. good job!
     
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    a life in ashes

    a life in ashes mercury summer

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    I like it, my only issue is you've got a couple of spelling errors.

    Just me being picky lol.
     

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