My other name is scratch and thats wat I do I lay down a track something you can listen to You better watch out before I slap you again Confidence is what you lack, you understand? "Fame?" Something you dream about "Help!" A word you need to shout I barely began the second verse Am I going too fast? Should I go in reverse? Come on son, try to keep up In the middle of your line you get stuck Try again son, or are you too wiped out? I am the unstoppable, Im someone you shall never doubt Is that a tear I see running down your face Didn't yo momma tell you, "You don't have the pace!" If I did wear a condom, you wouldn't even be here Yo mom was up all night cause i put her into fear She was shocked with the longness She told me all your problems, including your fungus "Stop this!" you say Quite down please I say you dont even have to stay You gonna walk out the door Wait till I use you to wipe the floor Do you think this is just a game You wont think that untill I bring your name to shame Ima leave you here so you can reflect I believe what I said will have an effect Consisting of verbal insults those lines I wrote Here's a Micheal Jackson song you can quote So everyone listen up and take a note Before I smake you up so u can think you float Cause by the time i finish you already sunk English was probably the subject you will flunk Ill see you in a couple of decades In the hospital when you got yo mommas AIDS This is no battle, this is a war Im waitin to hear what you have in store
thas pretty good for a first rap. try to use more sophisticated rhymes and try to use more language techniques such as personifications, similies, metaphors, oxymorans...stuff like that, it will make your rap sound even better. 7/10 for that rap
No offense, but there's nothing breakthrough about this rhyme. I mean, I've heard millions just like it, and I've heard millions better. (4/10)