How could you have happened to me?

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    Seinfeld

    Seinfeld We are the nobodies LPA Super Member

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    How could you have happened to me?:


    I'm on my way out into the cold / under the moon
    and my mind's still raging inside
    I'm on my way out, hope I make it home soon
    'cause my mind's still raging inside

    I want to let it all out
    and be left all alone
    I don't want you here now
    since I'm always on my own

    Out of my clothes and into your bed
    Out of my skin and into your head
    Out of my life and into your arms
    Out of my way and right into harm

    You always want to help me
    solve problems, which you've caused
    You always want to help me
    fight battles, which you've already lost

    And I'm finally fed up with it always being me
    In the middle of words, fists and feet
    And I'm finally fed up with it always being me
    *tied down and unable to leave*

    *So now...Let. Me. Be. Free.*

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    esaul17

    esaul17 antichrist

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    Great piece! I love the title, and most of the poem a lot. The last line could use a touch of work, but outside of that, it is good.

    One of my favourite pieces from you in a while :)
     
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    MooMoozer

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    :( it made me feel sad inside..

    but it was good.
     

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