Motionless

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    Casual D

    Casual D I WON'T BE YOUR CASUAL D. LPA Administrator

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    When I finished this two weeks ago I didn't want to post this up because of how personal it was to me and how special I held it to my heart (like Breaking The Habit is to Mike) and in the end I felt, since this is indeed the work of three different artists, despite being personal to me it should be shown. Unable to get in touch with myself completely I ended up getting help from Will of our forums and my friend Danielle(who also has a name on here but I cannot think of it right now) who helped strengthen my song where it lacked lyrically. I can honestly say had I not gotten help on this song it would have not reached half its potential so I thank my two friends who helped me on this song for making it what it really is, and officially making it my best work to date, surpassing Blind Death by a large amount lyrically. This song is very Linkin Park-ish in the sense of how it would be performed. Rapped and sung out at parts.

    Anyways..
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    Motionless
    Lyrics written and copyrighted by Derek Jonathan Oswald, Will Maltby and Danielle McKenzie Bossi

    [Verse 1]
    What made you say and do all that to me?
    You kept on makin' us seem like a maybe
    Kept knowing little but lusting much
    All for that previously unknown touch
    You've broken a promise to yourself
    And you've lost all that you've got left
    But just remember that when he leaves
    You best not come crawlin' back to me
    And I can't say that I didn't warn you
    Because all I've said is now a truth
    But you didn't listen nor did you care
    Now all this pain is more than you can bare
    You screwed up once and you screwed up twice
    It's about damn time that you've paid the price
    Pieces to pieces and tears to tears
    This decision's gonna' haunt you for years
    Maybe you'll learn a little before the next
    You have my best wishes for a later test
    But why you couldn't see this from the start
    I'll never know and now we're fallin apart

    [Pre Chorus(Whispered)]
    Why do you do this to me?(x3)

    [Chorus]
    When I saw you at the start
    You quickly had my heart
    Now it's been broken down and shattered
    Can't get by the endless cling and clatter(x2)
    Now we're at the end (at the end)
    A little less than friends
    Doesn’t seem like you see it as I do;
    I tried telling that to you (telling that to you)(x2)
    I wont be there, when you need help to carry on,
    Too bad you didn’t say that you would miss me when I'm gone

    [Verse 2]
    Please just turn around, I cant stand your face
    Knowing what you did to me just makes you a disgrace.
    Can't believe I ever let you take her place,
    At least I know in her mind I was never erased.
    Now I'm left alone (alone)(L) with all the lies I've faced,
    All this wasted time I cannot replace,
    Never again will you get inside of me.
    And never will I let you make me plea,
    Everything is over with, its plain to see.
    So why don’t you just walk away and let me be?
    Walk out the door, and don't look at me.
    I never want to deal with this again,
    We're just friends, everything else is just pretend.
    Now exactly what is the message that you're trying to send?
    One minute were close, the next we're not,
    Oh well, it’s too late I guess you missed your shot,
    I'm leaving you today whether you like it or not,
    What’s that? You regret what you said?
    Then why do I still feel that you'd rather have my head?

    [Pre Chorus(Whispered)]
    Why do you do this to me?(x3)

    [Chorus]
    When I saw you at the start
    You quickly had my heart
    Now it's been broken down and shattered
    Can't get by the endless cling and clatter(x2)
    Now we're at the end (at the end)
    A little less than friends
    Doesn’t seem like you see it as I do;
    I tried telling that to you (telling that to you)(x2)
    I wont be there, when you need help to carry on,
    Too bad you didn’t say that you would miss me when I'm gone

    [Verse 3]
    Stopping for a second or two,
    I pray for the answer on what to do,
    Every time I run away I keep on coming back to you,
    I wish I could take the hurt ,
    and throw it all away .
    Instead of rotting in the thought,
    Of my existence everyday.
    The damage took its toll,
    All that’s left is something bitter and cold.
    A story deep inside, words too hurtful to be told,
    I'm untrue to myself/living for somebody else.
    I wanna break away/live inside the darkness by myself,
    Anything is better then the hell you put me through.
    Too blind to see the monster that you were turning me into,
    All my love given to you, damn near eternally in debt,
    All my love and happiness, became my anger and regret.

    [Pre Chorus(Whispered)]
    Why do you do this to me?(x3)

    [Chorus]
    When I saw you at the start
    You quickly had my heart
    Now it's been broken down and shattered
    Can't get by the endless cling and clatter(x2)
    Now we're at the end (at the end)
    A little less than friends
    Doesn’t seem like you see it as I do;
    I tried telling that to you (telling that to you)(x2)
    I wont be there, when you need help to carry on,
    Too bad you didn’t say that you would miss me when I'm gone

    [Bridge]
    My patience is wearing down,
    My nerves are growing tight.
    From our struggles every-night
    Never will collapse and I'm not ready to give in.
    Just know that in this fight that you will never win
    I'm getting over you so don’t begin to take me back,
    My love for you has now begun fading into black.

    [Ending Chorus]
    When I saw you at the start
    You quickly had my heart
    Now it's been broken down and shattered
    Can't get by the endless cling and clatter(x2)
    Now we're at the end (at the end)
    A little less than friends
    Doesn’t seem like you see it as I do;
    I tried telling that to you (telling that to you)
    I tried telling that to you
    (Now we're a little less than friends)
    I tried telling that to you
    (Now we're a little less than friends)
    Can't get by the endless cling and clatter
    Now it's been broken down and shattered
    I tried telling that to you
    I tried telling that to you
    And now I wont be there,
    when you need help to carry on,
    Too bad you didn’t say you’d miss me in the end.
     
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    Will

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    Derek doesn't know how to make short songs. :lol:

    I can't comment on it since I helped. :)
     
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    Cal

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    Holy S***

    Warner Bros have a new candidate

    thats freaking amazing, u all did an AMAZING job on it i love it i really feel the message in it
     
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    Terry

    Terry Yeah, but I wish you were my shadow. LPA Super Member

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    Wow..........unbelievable! (w00t)
     
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    Casual D

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    Well, *looks at will* I think we got to tell everyone the truth..

    Guys..

    Me and Will are G..

    Gonna be in a band when we grow up possibly. What, did you have something else in mind? :wth:
     
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    Andrea

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    ^ :lol:

    EXCELLENT WORK! :)
     
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    LinkinTheory

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    That was a rush. Excellent, bravo, an ass whomping. So when does track one get released? Since your ga. . . going to be in a band. . .
     
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    Terry

    Terry Yeah, but I wish you were my shadow. LPA Super Member

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    Huh. It continued off differently in my head.........

    I bet you both will do really good if you start a band. ^_^
     
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    LPObsessed

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    I like it really cool really really really cool that would be even cooler when you guys make a band and make up some music to it and stuffs
     
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    Alacrity

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    I liked it. i think that you guys have alot of potential and you obviously care alot about it...I mean you have the pre chorus ending chorus whispered parts...wow. Great Job...
     
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    Trumtram

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    the lyrics are great, but the rhyme scheme isnt linkin park at all ;)
     
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    Will

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    He didn't say it was. He said the way it would be performed, which is rap-rock.
     

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