"Upon my chest my hands doth lie" Upon my chest my hands doth lie, ____To forever be, to test that—our time! Against these odds, I lie and wait ____For the Hands of God to seal mine own fate: Heaven? Hell? That is the question: ____A product, thus, thus! mine own invention— Whether I would serve God with He, ____Or reign in Hell: the devil in Hades. And lo! I shall at once know now, ____For thus I will beseech, I will ask how Eternity has come to me, ____Taken me by thy hand that I may see What lays for me out there waiting. ____I have spent much of my time debating Whether I would much prefer the ____Companionship of an angel above, Or the lack of mercy and love ____From the devil and his minions; no dove Would thus be able to help me ____Escape the devil’s brutal tyranny— Thus I am a servant of God: ____And I shed thus, this my hidden façade.
Hey that was pretty good! I liked the first four lines the most, they sound so powerfull. The whole poem has a rather strange feel to it which makes it really nice. Great work man!
Will, this is just.. dazzling + breathtaking + terrific + fantastic + other awesome words describing this beauty = dazzthterrintasticotherawesomewords!
Beautiful use of the English language, Will. This is really well developed and shines in light of your other work. [And I though those were all great pieces as well.] I think this may, in fact, be your best effort. You are very talented.
Thanks for the comments! Keep them coming. I'm looking to keep working on poems similar to this one (the language). Maybe I'll publish them...
i really like this piece. particularly how it develops and the overall structure. very poetic. i look forward to reading more.