I wrote this song just yesterday. It is the deepest song I have ever written, coming directly from my point of view. Don't even bother putting a score, i wasn't going for best writing/ <div align=center>"Her"</div> Always on my mind Making me tiptoe a thin line Everything I do Makes me think of you. Everything I am Everything I could be Isn't the least bit worthy Why do I do this to myself? Hurt myself because of you. Without the pain, I'd probably Wouldn't know what to do. Why did you do it? Ignore me like that? Made me feel like #### Wishing I could get shot. If every girl Showed up at my door But not you I'd slam the door Just before Shooting myself through That's how I felt, That's how I feel No exaggeration The pain is real The day my whole world will shatter, Has already passed. Nothing seems to matter Can't do anything, It's like being in a full-body cast. But you showed me who I was I needed this because, My life was a mess. But now that's over, And I have a whole new life To discover. ---------------- This isn't really the end, but Part II is just made for her eyes. That's why it seems like an abrupt end. If I seem happy, it's an act, I've been doing it since the 5th grade. Not for this girl, that just started, but back then I had different reasons.
To tell you the truth, it has a special place in my heart. Sounds cheesy but it really does, becuase that's where it came from. I said I wasn't going to put on Part II, but I guess in spite of the number of replies. . .(Thanks a bunch you 14 people who saw this!) I will. I was serious about it If you still have douby I may not know what life's about But I still know what I had for you Was real, Why else would i feel The was I do When I got back home, I wanted to think about you To be alone You were everything I wanted Sarcastic, Funny Not greedy for money With a mood that was always sunny That first day I knew I was lost Knew what it would cost To open up For the first time to a girl I was so damn nervous, I though I would hurl. I wish I could have told you that day Maybe then you'd a felt the same way. Maybe then you'd feel the same way But I guess That now I have to say That this is the end I'll leave you alone To forget who I was To end up as a memory, Covered in fuzz And before I go I want you to know, I don't deserve you I deserve to be alone Where nothing good will ever be shown. And where the pain is doubled When everything's gone ------------ It may sound weird, but then I am.
hey that a really great poem i started to cry, you got some powerful words or something, really awsume job. *~*marissa*~*
Sorry, i didn't think too many would even comprehend it, it sounds weird, kinda like it's just essence, and no word play. Nothing to make it sound right, just there. I would say thanks for the comment, but then I'd be thanking you for crying, and well. . . you know.
Thanks guys. It really means a lot to me. I thought this one was going to be shot down. I mean, the writing I could have reworked, and made it sound better, but I left it. You guys really helped pull me out of a slump. I wrote that song in a depressed state three days ago. You guys made me feel a lot better. I'll owe ya one. If your ever in Indiana. . .