Save her from him/me

Save her from him/me:

Another burning tear runs down her cheek
as she thinks of the beatings she's taken in the past few weeks
She really can't think of what hurts worse
His fist, his belt or simply his words
No way of turning back or even moving on
She can never be free...until he's gone

And I want just another glance
Another look at your bleeding hands
Before I can grasp them and pull you away
Save you from myself, then I'll make me pay
Make me suffer for what I've done
I know you think it's sick...to me...it's simply fun

I don't know what brought it up...hope someone likes it...probably not though

 

I fucking love it actualy. It needs to have some stuff added to it but I really like it, well done.

 

*silence*
*applause*

 

thank you both very much

@grandmaster hellflame: I would've written more...I just didn't wanna ruin by just wanting to add to it's length...so...until I know what to add I'll leave it alone...unless you have some suggestions

 

I tell you what man, I could add some stuff that I think would look pretty cool and I'll PM you what i have and we can do a little colab. How does that sound to you?

 

I'd like that very much ...if you want just PM me your edited version of it and if I like it you can post it as a colab. from 'us' and see what people think ... (I don't think it would be fair if I got another extra post just for reposting my parts and some parts I didn't even work on...so...I'll leave it up to you)