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Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by esaul17, Sep 3, 2006.

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    esaul17

    esaul17 antichrist

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    Summer said, “think of the warmth we could share”
    Winter promised pain and despair
    Summer smiled and took me by the hand
    But I froze at Winter’s command
    Summer helped me blush and bid me stay
    But Winter led me away
    Summer promised to shield me from the cold
    Winter said “you’ll freeze ‘til you grow old”
    Summer said, “We’ll represent life that never sours”
    Winter countered, “There can beauty without flowers”
    Summer smiled, “But could you live with that desolate view?”
    Winter replied “empty spaces are all that’s true”
    Summer held me and said, “I can see the fire in your eyes”
    Winter laughed. “Can it melt the tears that he cries?”
    Summer grew frightened. “Don’t let the cold steal your heart!”
    Winter laughed. “I needn’t take what was mine from the start.”
    Summer assured me. “I’ll always be around”
    But Winter said, “You’re losing your ground”
    Now all the trees were blanketed in snow
    We all know there was nowhere else to go
    Winter said “I’ll freeze any tears that you cry”
    Summer collapsed. “Hold me close and watch me die”
     
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    Bailey

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    dude thats intense! u write dat? man its kewl if u want i cn put sum scratch work on a file and give it to ya and u can do summit with it if ya like just if it goes numba 1 i demand a percentage of 70/30 lol
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    bloody fantastic.
    i read the first few lines and like"nah...this ain't esaul.."
    i end the reading with like "fuck! fuck! esaul, you genius!"
     
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    esaul17

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    Thanks. Long time, no see Trans. It's funny, just yesterday I was re-reading your entry to the old lyrics competition (it seemed as great as ever!). I was wondering, did you add me to your MSN a while back? Because I have your freakolp email added added now, but you've never once been on it.

    Anyway, I look forward to reading some new stuff by you.
     
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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    So I read the poem and my brain went 'wow, beautiful!' and then it reminded me of something I wrote a while back about Time (yes, the search button is your friend! :lol:) and then my thoughts went back to 'wow! beautiful!' and 'this is different from esaul's usual style, but still beautiful!'

    And then I read Bailey's post and my thoughts changed to 'guh buh duh wha?'

    One thing:
     
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    Rather Red

    Rather Red Well-Known Member

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    I like how Winter comes first in the end, before Summer, showing Winter's victory. Great poem.
     
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    Janie Jones

    Janie Jones Meghna is a Headcase

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    Its so beautiful...
    I love the season metaphors...
     
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    Seinfeld

    Seinfeld We are the nobodies LPA Super Member

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    ...*down on knees* dude...I got goosebumps... :thumbsup:
     

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