I'll protect you precious butterfly

I'll protect you precious butterfly:

Even the softest of wings are there to be worn down
So don't mind if I carry you on, please don't frown
Don't mind me precious, I'm just another of many,
That would die to be yours, I'm sure there are plenty
So fly on butterfly, so elegantly, fly on
Remember my shoulder's there for you to cry on
If your journey becomes tiring and you're too weak to fly on
Remember my shoulder's there for you to cry on
Precious butterfly I'll save you from wind and storms
Precious butterfly I'll protect you from pain and thorns
So fly on, so elegantly, fly on
My shoulder's yours to cry on


First time I've ever written a love poem....

 

Repetitive, but not bad...although the use of the word "frown" strokes a poor note with me.

 

mhhh....I'll work on it...thanx

 

The frown thing might just be me.

 

work on the lines and reword a few and restructure this it could be turned into a song easily

 

you know my opinion but i'll say it again I LOVE IT!and you must be joking that this is your first time writing a love poem it's fantastic!the most cutest thing i've ever read!