The First Song You Wrote

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    Dedicated

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    I was wondering if you could post the very first song you wrote?



    I'll post mine when I'm allowed on the comp :p


    My first song is the worst song I've ever written :lol:

    I wrote it when I really like some girl

    The Ballad Of Hannah Dorr

    I remember my old school,
    There was a girl there that made me drool,
    I liked her so damn bad,
    But a boyfriend she had.

    Chorus:
    Her name was Hannah Dorr,
    She wasn't rich but she wasn't poor,
    She really hated me,
    But this is a love struck melody.

    I remember she was once sick,
    I blamed it on a little prick,
    She was in one of my dreams,
    I really like he it seems.

    Chorus

    It is a few years on,
    And a very long time has gone,
    I still like her anyway,
    So there's nothin' left to say.

    Chorus


    I'm quite embarrassed about how amazingly sh*t I can make my songs :lol:

    I would just like to say: I think I have come along way from writing that sh*t :p
     
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    Jamie

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    i post mine here later on tonight when i get off work
     
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    Sludge Factory

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    This is the first and only song I've ever written.


    Go Away


    The clock counts down each and every day
    Im hoping it stops just so I can stay
    I think about my life
    The way it used to be
    So many regrets
    Held inside of me

    I don't take life for granted
    and I know I never will
    Still looking for the answers
    But I don't know what to feel

    I live life day by day
    Hoping it will stay
    What used to be has quickly gone away
    Everything has changed and can never be the same
    While your living in luxury
    Im living with this pain

    Just go away (Go away)
    Leave me alone
    I can do everything here on my own

    Just go away (Go away)
    Leave me be
    You'll never become a part of me

    The small hand is even further now
    and the big hand is in pursuit
    I put on my headphones
    And deactivate the mute

    I think of all the good times
    and some of the bad
    All of the memories
    Knowing I'll never have

    If its not one thing its another
    But that will someday change
    The time is coming closer
    and with it is no pain

    Just go away (Go away)
    Leave me alone
    I can do everything here on my own

    Just go away (Go away)
    Leave me be
    You'll never become a part of me

    Just go away
    Go away
    Go away
     
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    Terry

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    I Can

    You despise me
    You hate me
    You never loved me
    You only stayed 'cause you had to
    Acted like you cared about me 'cause you ######' had to

    You never wanted me
    You thought I couldnt take care of myself
    Well, guess what?
    I CAN!!!

    You've abused me
    Laughed at me
    Talked about me
    Never shutted the #### up about me
    Always using me as the subject
    Pointing your ######' finger at me
    Thought i couldnt do anything
    Well, guess what?
    I CAN!!

    You think Im a child
    A nobody
    Some worthless being that cant do anything
    Thought of me as who could never amount to anything
    Well, guess what?
    I CAN!!!!!!!!!

    I give
    I reach out
    I try to make you happy
    But you slap my hand away
    Now
    Im not going to try anymore!!
     
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    Logan

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    that's a damn good song :D :D i realy like it
     
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    that's a damn good song :D :D i realy like it [/b][/quote]
    Thank you. :D I think im going to write another if I get the time.
     
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    erasethepain

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    This wasnt the first version of it but I can't find any earlier ones.

    Suicide Letter

    Nothing ever works out and I can't seem to do anything right,
    I am such a failure for messing up everything in my life,
    I can't go through with this anymore so I'm ending it here tonight,
    I'm saying goodbye cause there's no other way out,
    I'm putting an end to this life, full of nothing but doubts
    (This frustration) has wore me to the point where I can't go on anymore,
    I'm looking in the mirror while my tears hitting the floor,
    I hate this face, and I hate the fact that I always end in defeat,
    Everyday has become just another to fail at everything in reach,
    To prove to myself that I'm just too weak

    The more I come apart, The less I have to put myself back together
    I can't go though this, it never seems to get better,
    I have nothing left,
    I'm ready to take my last breathe

    I just wish things were like they use to,
    Now everydays become a struggle to pull through,
    Im trying my best not to give up, but I don't know what else I should do,
    There's no way to describe the pain I've felt,
    and there's no way I can depend on myself,
    If I could do one thing right then maybe I could be convinced,
    That there's a way for me to get past this,
    But there's not, so I'm writting this letter,
    To let you know, I tried to stick this out but I just couldn't keep my life together

    The more I come apart, The less I have to put myself back together
    I can't go though this anymore, it never seems to get better,
    I have nothing left,
    I'm ready to take my last breathe

    Everydays the same,
    Me ####### up everything
    (This is the only way out of the pain)
     
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    [Darken Hybrid]

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    This isn't a song. just some rhymes. that was my first "song" I posted.

    yea, back for the first time
    tryin' to make this rhyme
    one of the greatest of all times
    introducing some pride
    not to make you cry
    not to make you blind
    but to realize that you've been livin' a lie
    release your inner side and be alive
    it's like taking a long ass drive
    without anything to survive,
    but it doesn't matter, you just gotta try
    i'm here to make you realize,
    to be happy and don't wave good bye
    'cause this aint over until you purify
     
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    Will

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    How can you be back for the first time? Doesn't that mean it would be your second time if you're coming back?

    lmfao. :rolleyes:
     
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    [Darken Hybrid]

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    How can you be back for the first time? Doesn't that mean it would be your second time if you're coming back?

    lmfao. :rolleyes: [/b][/quote]
    No. "I'm back for the first time." :rolleyes:
     
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    Will

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    No. "I'm back for the first time." :rolleyes: [/b][/quote]
    It's impossible to be back for the first time unless you left and you're coming back, thus making it your second time.
     
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    Mark

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    It's impossible to be back for the first time unless you left and you're coming back, thus making it your second time. [/b][/quote]
    Will has a point.

    Unless you clone yourself and have your clone go for the first time....but you share the same brain and thoughts, so in essence you're back for the first time.....(my head hurts)
     
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    Will has a point.

    Unless you clone yourself and have your clone go for the first time....but you share the same brain and thoughts, so in essence you're back for the first time.....(my head hurts) [/b][/quote]
    that's another way to introduce yourself, ghetto style. :lol: :angry:
     
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    I broke the little center scroller thing on my mouse switching between messages to find out what the hell you were trying to say.
     
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    User Name

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    The first song I wrote didn't have a title at the time, but I decided to rewrite the song and rename it Worth. I stopped writing it and won't plan on releasing it because it isn't something I would like to express as an artist.
     
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    Will has a point.

    Unless you clone yourself and have your clone go for the first time....but you share the same brain and thoughts, so in essence you're back for the first time.....(my head hurts) [/b][/quote]
    It could just be his first time coming back, as in he went once, and is now coming back to the same place for the FIRST TIME. It makes sense, just sounds wierd.

    Anyway, here's my first.

    Inside Out
    Feelings that are trapped inside,
    Are things that I just cant hide,
    Hidden away in my heart,
    They slowly tear me apart,
    Running through my veins,
    This anger, this pain,
    Ive gotta let it out,
    Gotta get it out,
    Will it help to shout?

    Chorus
    (These) Emotions (This) Devotion (These) Relationships,
    Its all just a pile of ####,
    I cant take it anymore,
    Just being around you is a chore,
    The #### has hit the fan,
    But you say youve got a plan,
    To let me know how you feel,
    You say you know what to do,
    But everything has come unglued,
    Just let your feelings go,
    See how it flows,
    When you turn yourself inside out.

    As I turn to walk away,
    I realize what you have done to me,
    Its hard to express,
    But I know its not love or tenderness.
    You have changed me in a way,
    In which I can never go back,
    This is who I am now,
    And I can live with it.
    I like the way I am,
    I liked myself before,
    But this is who I am,
    Thanks to you.
    I used to be so loving, so caring,
    And now I am full of hate,
    You have tormented me,
    Deprived me of my needs,
    You had me on my knees,
    Until I looked deep inside,
    To my emotions,
    That you made me hide.
    So here I am today,
    So different from yesterday,
    Its my time to go,
    I have to let go,
    And turn myself inside out.


    Chorus

    Now that we are through,
    I know exactly what to do.
    I will find someone new,
    Someone nothing like you.
    I need someone to hold,
    Someone to be around when I get cold,
    When I get cold on the inside,
    From the #### that you made me hide,
    When you changed my personality,
    And made me your slave.
    I wont stand for it anymore,
    Because I am not your whore.
    I am not your scapegoat,
    Who you can just hide behind,
    Like a mask to the world.
    So finally I am myself,
    And without me, everyone can see your true self.
    The dark ugly inside,
    That makes up who you are.
    Not just the bones and flesh that you were before.
    Lets see what people think of you,
    When youre alone and crying on the floor.
    Can you take it anymore?
    You lasted so long when I was by your side,
    But now you=re crippled and hurt inside.
    Thanks for the memories,
    That will haunt my days forever,
    Thanks for everything,
    Cuz you made my life so unpleasant.


    Chorus (x2)
     

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