Scars

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    a life in ashes

    a life in ashes mercury summer

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    Scars

    Somehow you always seem to fade away,
    My thoughts for you kept behind the glass,
    But now they're waking up,
    Abused no more, with broken skin,
    I raise a bloodied one-finger salute,

    You,
    Grow up,
    Stand up,
    Shut up,

    No longer do I sit behind empty words,
    Slicing through the sickness,
    So ugly now I see the real you,
    See your true colours,

    Scars to be unmade,
    Scars turn life to gray,
    Scars I sever into you,

    Scars to be unmade,
    Scars turn life to gray,
    Scars I sever into you,
    Scars that bleed right through,
    Scars to drag you down,
    Scars of time in which you'll drown,

    I,
    Failed you?
    Drowned you,
    Fuck you.



    ...thoughts please...
     
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    Janie Jones

    Janie Jones Meghna is a Headcase

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    You have truly mastered the art of being sad but not emo. Looking at the title, I suspected something emoish but its really cool, I can imagine this with beats and cool electric guitar.
    I like the way you've worded it, and how it all pans out, if thats the expresssion I want.
    Love the last line. :lol:
     
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    a life in ashes

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    thanks.
     
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    Sakshi

    Sakshi Well-Known Member

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    nice poem!!

    hey thats a great poem!! keep up your good effort!!
    sakshi:flowers:
     

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