Love

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by esaul17, Apr 25, 2006.

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    esaul17

    esaul17 antichrist

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    Love

    Where?

    Where does it begin?

    With the smile on a stranger’s face?

    Or in the moment when that faces passes indifferently?

    When does your heart cease to be yours, becoming another’s?

    And what can you do when, in their possession, that heart becomes neglected?

    What happens when you lack the courage to draw their attention toward that withering heart?

    Hope, when tempered with neglect, gives way to the pain of despair

    But how easy it can be to relinquish control of your heart

    When you risk a smile at that indifferent face

    When that smile is ignored

    There’s where it ends

    There

    Hate


    I really don't like this one, but thought I'd throw it up hear anyways. Tell me what you think. And sorry about the horrendous format. Some lines were too long for the forums. It is supposed to be a diamond shape, mirrored at the longest line. Now this crappy poem is even worse.
     
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    GrafiTTied

    GrafiTTied Well-Known Member

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    yeah this obviuosly not one of your best, but i guess its hard to write about love.
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    you cant get all, now can you? love the format idea though. thought of trying it out myself, but you beat me to it. i'd say the poem is beautifully random.
     
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