Knock, Knock “Knock, knock Who’s there?” So many barricades and defensive mechanisms Kept at bay with self-bound criticisms You say you’re content without having a true friend Yet you speak of suicide, that you fear not the end Depression is not something written in your genes You’re family may be unhappy, but by no means Were you born determined to feel the same You’ve been hurt before, but forget the pain Do you know how much you hurt me When you said I don’t know you and that will forever be? That my opinion is worthless, I’m nothing in your eyes And I can never change how you feel inside Have you ever heard the saying “no risk, no gain”? Insist on having no one and you’ll drive yourself insane You tell yourself your worthless, that is why you’re alone And now you can’t believe anything else you’re shown You’ve had a poor childhood, but place that in the past You can live and learn, but learn to last I’ve thrown my life away for you in my dreams Yet you long for death, two opposite extremes You say you want to be happy, but you cannot win Because to let someone in your heart you have to let them under your skin “Knock, knock Who’s there? It’s me Please open the door…”
*grammar Sorry, but if you want to be critical about someone else's, I think you should learn to spell the word first. P.S. - Knock has a 'K' in it.
Actually, I think it was really good I didn't catch any grammatical errors. I don't know what heshboy's talking about and I don't think he does either. ;P It was really good I esspecially like the line "So many barricades and defensive mechanisms kept at bay with self-bound criticisms". Good job, 8/10.
I Our The Hesh do know what I'm talking about. I was laughing so hard, I made unbiased mistakes. It's ok though, because I'm unbiased and so can you. So don't makes me cries ;_; XD I made more mistakes, and I'm not going to correct them. I'll correct them when the new LP album drops.
that was very good I would give it an 8/10 too. ive always wanted to write something like that except that i havent got down to doing it.
Heh. Beautiful. As for the mistakes mentioned; Have you ever heard of the saying “no risk, no gain”? You tell yourself you're worthless, that is why you’re alone Minor mistakes, nothing worth fussing about.