Sunshine

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    Darcy

    Darcy LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    This song came to me in a dream where I was driving and Bob Dylan was in the back seat of my car. I don't really have a car, and I've never met Bob Dylan, but I wrote a song about it anyway.

    Give me an honest opinion of what you think, etc etc.

    * = rhythm change for the chorus
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    Sunshine

    So sure, you have stepped out of here
    Wearing the face you never wear
    Is that the way you want to go
    If you close your eyes you'll never know

    Sunshine has come and gone again
    I couldn't tell how long it's been
    Nobody wanted like you did
    Is that the way you want to live?

    *Did you think your life was heaven sent?
    Did you change the lighting before you left?
    Well I couldn't say where you've gone
    But I know that I'll be moving on

    Was I just as bad to believe your show?
    Well you've found your place, we can only hope
    But I can't explain why you came around
    Speaking the language that brought you down

    But am I a crutch or am I a voice?
    When goodbye will never be my first choice
    You only believe in the bittersweet
    But you never found that side of me

    *Did you think this time was just a gift?
    Well how did you feel when it came to this?
    No one can say how it got so hard
    But I know of much better ways to start
     
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    Christopher

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    I think it's great the way everything fits together
    but i don't see the like with the dream you had
    to me that's not so important cause i like the song ...
     
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    Linja

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    Great. I think you rhyme ridiculously well.
     
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    Darcy

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    Thanks for the compliments, both of you!

    St0f - The words in the song are what I imagine Bob Dylan was saying.
    I might be crazy, but it was good inspiration. :p

    Mali - I try to make it rhyme without making it too obvious.


    Thanks again. :)
     
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    Joe

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    Another great piece of work, and Mali is right, you rhyme really well. Brilliant job. :thumbsup:
     
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    Darcy

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    Thanks! You always have great stuff to say about my writing. Mali does too. Nice people, the both of you.
     
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    Joe

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    Haha, it is great & I should be thanking you, I really enjoy reading your lyrics.
     
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    Darcy

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    Thanks again!

    Should I let you know when they are sung? If this folk band ever gets our act together, we'll be using this.
     
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    Linja

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    ^_^ Yes, please let me know. It's a beautiful song and will be even more beautiful as a sung song. (That didn't make too much sense but you get it, right?)
     
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    Darcy

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    Yes! I get it. Thank you, I'll let you know. I'll be playing violin for the track. :)
     
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    Joe

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    I'd love to hear it too & using violin makes me look forward to it even more.
     
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    Mk_Spike

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    Nice words man i might use it as a song ill put music to it bro. ill then try to make a powertab file and then post it up powertab kinda converts midi music so yea... um that if ure ok wit it bro?
     
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    Darcy

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    First of all, I've already stated that I am making my own folk song out of this with my own folk band. No, you can not use it. Second of all, if you cared to look at the information right underneath my name and avatar, I am not a "man" or a "bro" so please don't call me that.

    That having been said, thanks, I'm glad you liked it.
     
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    Todd

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    That's called plagarism, and if you use the LPA as a resource to steal from, I will ban you.
     
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    Luke

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    I'd say that's letting him off easy, it might just be a set of lyrics but plagerism is a sueable offence.
     
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    Darcy

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    Thank you boys for helping me get the message to this kid. I was severely pissed off by him.
     
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    my apoligies
     
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    Darcy

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    You are forgiven, but please don't do it again.
     

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