A Silenced Whisper

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by Casual D, May 29, 2003.

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    Casual D

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    It's called fiction. If this story was about me that would mean I'm 43, with a wife and a kid, both brutually murdered and that I work in a construction yard.

    Sometimes it requires common sense dear.

    Thanks for the compliment though...
     
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    yea im sorry but i just had to say it lol..no hard feelings...im sure your a loveley girl ;)
     
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    Who want's chapter 3!??!

    (I'll write it later if ya'll want it.)
     
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    ME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D :D :D :D :D



    :lol:


    I'm sure it'll be great :whistle:
     
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    ME!!!!!...this is the only 2 chapters i ever read in my life :)
     
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    I WANT CHAPTER 3!!! :chemist:
     
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    good stuff
     
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    Chapter 3 please. :)
     
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    Terry

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    lol. PEOPLE, I WAS KIDDING!!!! god, lol.

    & yes i would like chapter 3 please. --chants-- CHAP-TER 3, CHAP-TER 3, CHAP-TER 3!!
     
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    Jawknee

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    No...




    You weren't. :shifty:


    Damnit Derek, drop whatever you're doing right now and give us chapter 3!!! :whistle:
     
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    Note: Read this while listening to "From The Inside" by Linkin Park. It goes sooooooooo good. AHHHH, the action has commenced!!! ::High-fives Derek:: Badass, buddy...just badass!! B)
     
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    Terry

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    wow......chills, man, chills..........but i thought it was EXCELLENT!!!!!!






    & good use w/ the swears. i liked those.
     
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    Derek.. You fu*king rule! lol.. :rolleyes:

    Great story man.. Can't wait for Chapter 4! (w00t)
     
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    You're really great!! Next chapter please..
     
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    Chapter 4 up. All chapters will now be in the first post of this thread to conserve space.

    I hope you enjoy Chapter 4. I made it bloody for you.
     
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    Terry

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    ooh,..........great, like always. keep the chapters comin'!!!
     
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    Casual D

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    Jawknee? Where are you buddy!?
     
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    Goodness gracious. This had to be the best chapter yet!!!

    Good points:

    * How you don't immediately continue this chapter where the last one left off and how you continue it later.

    * The tension I could feel between the main character and the 2 killers.

    * The dialogue! Just great! The last line of this chapter really does some justice!

    * The Dry Cell song.


    Bad points:

    ?

    Derek, you are the man, brotha! :D
     
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    Casual D

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    As a bonus. Chapter 5 is now up, ending Season 1.

    A little surprize is in store for you at the end of the chapter. Yes, it's been planned for some time now :). Bet you didn't expect it?
     
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    OMG!! Derek and Omar, you guys!!! I can't believe it!! Hahahahaha, this is going great!!! :D What a way to end the season. I need to go read the latest in Copper's tales. Derek, believe me when I say these get better every time.
     

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