When I look into your eyes There’s nothing but an empty hope Caught in the middle of hell And you can’t seem to cope Trapped inside a black hole That you gave life to Raging battles in your head And there’s nothing I can do You’ve caused your end You’ve caused your life to be Nothing more than a shadow I sit and wonder what you think Sitting vacantly on the side Just waiting for tomorrow Tomorrow brings pain I saw the writing on the wall I know it’s you whom the bell tolls The illusions in your head Is the story your expression tells I know this lack of self-esteem Is taking away your life Cutting away your sanity Like a sharpened knife You’ve caused your end You’ve caused your life to be Nothing more than a shadow I sit and wonder what you think Sitting vacantly on the side Just waiting for tomorrow Tomorrow brings the same Waiting here for you to die Waiting here for you to break Waiting here for you to cry Waiting for the end of days Waiting here in this hell Waiting in this atmosphere Waiting for the signs to tell Its time to go You’ve caused your end You’ve caused your life to be Nothing more than a shadow I sit and wonder what you think Sitting vacantly on the side Just waiting for tomorrow I’ve caused my own end My life is nothing more Nothing more than a shadow I sit and wonder trying to think Sitting gracefully on the side Hoping that there is no tomorrow
Good job, flowed nicely. That last line reminded me of soemthing I wanted to write about a year ago, but I losy my completed verse and dropped it. Congrats.
it's good. i felt it forced. i've seen much more fluency in your other stuff. but it told me good. keep it up!
yeah some of the rhymes felt a bit forced, and it wasn't your best, but given how good your best is that's by now means a bad thing...
Yeah I know it's not my best but they are quite old lyrics, I was listening to Linkin Park-Easier To Run when I was writing this piece and I thought the flow of the verses were quite similar to that of Easier To Run. Thanks for the comments everyone