There is reasoning to every word I breathe These hands stained with the likes of impurity Substances of which the naked eye cannot see Lost words, lost thoughts of which you cannot conceive Strange letters and voices, that you will never perceive The very existence of my words and thoughts Ever so isolated and hidden, my mind rots I’m lost, and I’m finally caught red handed After all the lies, and deceptive deeds After all the tries, and desperate needs Spawned from the thoughts of greed/but freed Screaming it all out with utmost simplicity for you all to hear, to know that there is nothing to fear Making it clear so the whole world can understand the sheer pain of what I’ve had to endure submissions to suicidal conclusions it was for sure my life was stormed by a sudden burst of hate Just like the pages of this book, all torn away Just like the days when nothing ever went my way Like the tears that ran down from her face In life, in Buddha we’d pray, For righteousness to finally show it’s grace For the ambitions to finally rest in the right place To trust in somebody as much as we may But no matter how hard we pray we’ll never have it Distortion of reality is where I feel that I stand It is as if my last ounce of happiness is down to it’s last strand and I can neither speak or think for much longer No longer can I persevere to stay stronger all these hopes and dreams of mine they all seem so ridiculous it’s only a matter of time before I’ll be left to be forever emotionless Feel free to point out any flaws, or problems about this. Hope you guys like it. By the way, I can't think of a good title haha...
it's nice. the "Buddha" thing took it off track. just came in, cut, slew and shackled. it's good otherwise.... 6.99/10.
The Buddha part was a good selection, but it did put it off track. Perhaps you should lengthen that line, in order for it to flow. Wonderful job.
pretty good How about this for a name "The poem of Realism" I am writing a bunch of realism poems at the moment,ill buff them up onto this site when they are done anyway. Hope you like my idea.
Thanks for all the comments, they were greatly appreciated =] I guess I'll have to be more aware of how the flow is. Thanks again for the comments.