Of the Clock. He seeks for a passion for her, And She see's a desire for Him. He doesnt ask her out, like a unseen clock, She blindly keeps flirting with him. She keeps going, like another hour awaiting to be passed on a clock, it is inevitiable, they fall in love. She Loves to talk to Him, And he Loves to talk to her. They talk and talk, passing the time. But like all good clocks, they must stop. They take a break from eachother. But with most clocks, they rotate in a circle, and the Boy and Girl See eachother again. They start to make time pass, with there actions and words. She can't stop thinking about Him, And He can't stop worrying about Her. They start to miss eachother, and like all clocks that are repeting, they both see eachother again. On a night, when the clock was slow and ticking like a mineut. They see eachother in frozen time. She shows him, how much she desires for him, and he shows his passion for him. But with everything, they rush through this moment. As time progresses, they see eachother later, only to see eachother again, but in pain, she finds out that they have a dying fire, and He tries to buy more time. But you cannot buy time, as it goes on without stop. They rush time and do more but it dies. Futher in time, the clock ticks, and as it does, so does the Boy with his life, and She no longer desires the passion for Him that he once had. Like all round clocks, they repete. They continue to see eachother, locked in time. Only His passion with her Love, has they keep to pass the time. They go on, saddly, only to view back in time, so rethink all there times, repetes and slowly falling into broken shards of seconds on a hand. Keeping to watching a moment in time, He still has the Enjoyment of his passion, and She still had the love for Her Desire and looks back in time. only to be pushed to the presant time. The hour hand stucks 12, and they stop in time to becomes friends and at the last ring, The time has come to end. Note, I think i did a horrid job of this, but what do you guys think?
I see what your trying to say, but the major thing is that your saying it too well. You shouldn't be so literal and direct in your poetry, use metaphors, and other things to add interest and make it a bit less direct so the reader has to do a bit of thinking. That way it won't sound as much of a chronology Keep it up though!