Memories scar me to death With these lifeless eyes Pulsating lips Taken by the hour It's quicker then death It's quicker again Before you stab me in the neck Before you shoot that final bullet I have one thing to say Is that I died when you said... I LOVE YOU I went to heaven the next second And came down faster than you expected Down to the endless The images burn my head With lifeless eyes Blood soaked lips Waiting every second for this It's faster than life It's faster again Before you slit my throat Before you cut my head off I have one thing to say Is that I died when you said... I LOVE YOU I went to heaven the next second And came down faster than you expected Down to the endless Down again I want to take you with me And come out of this alive I died when you said "I love you" Down to the endless Before you do these things to me Before you take my life away I have one thing to say Is that i'm dead to you Before you can say I love you
not bad.. though the end is kinda stretched a bit.. mayhaps write something that doesnt completely revolve around death and love but still stays in the same context of what you're writting about.. it'll make it seem less redundant.. good though
*sniff* BRING OUR FRISKEY BACK! On another note, I really liked this. It's really dark, but ... sweet in a way. :chemist:
Deep, Dark, Depressive...*adds a G word*...... Ga *adds another G word*..... Ga *adds another G word*..... GREAT!