For my Mermaid. I’m stuck away in a lonely drought, I’m staring at the emptiness, something I never brought, I wonder if a star would come and kiss me willingly, Or take away the nothing that I’ve got. I sat there alone, As the whimsical moon rays upon me shone, And reminded me of the hopeful times, But now I’m bare, withered, torn. Everything at peace, When beneath the waters, some lives shall cease, Of imaginary mermaids and drowning fireflies, Happiness, to exist, pleads. Touch me again, Don’t leave me alone, to drive me insane, I hear you, but like others, see you not, Come alive and relieve my pain. it desperately needs your comments...
hmmm i dont really know what to say, im just looking at it blank, maybe its my mood............................. i'll read it again later and tell you, its not bad or anything, i just cant think of any constuctive suggestions right now sry