TRAUMATIZE

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    GrafiTTied

    GrafiTTied Well-Known Member

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    well i now this is nothing compared to all you poets out there
    but id like to make my mark here too.........
    so here's one of mine-

    TRAUMATIZE: (D.R.M)

    The power of dreams has no extremes
    Its limits are as far as the galaxies.
    But what happens when it all comes down
    Like a tower of crumbling cards
    And the light has burnt out from your stars
    When you find you have lost your rhyme
    Look around and find yourself lost in time
    Nothing to keep your sights on,
    Nothing to support your once strong iron
    Now it rusts and soon will disintegrate into its once natural dust form.

    Now shall I live without visions and aspirations?
    No precisions, no decisions
    Put my life into the hands of someone else
    To be molded into something else
    Likes and dislikes of my incarnate
    Forces me to impersonate
    Struggle to find myself again,
    Again and again, but in vain
    Soon I shall retreat and be void of all senses
    A life bound to blurred with powerful lenses
    I look up, my eyes with colors of white and gray
    Stricken with neutrality, despairs prey.
    So long, you shall see no more of me
    An idol loved by everyone,
    But hated by me.


    tell me what you think of it??
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    amazing....just fantastic! ^_^
     
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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    Great. This was my favourite part -->
     
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    heshboy

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    I was just reading Mali qoute and it makes me say you could be a legend one day.
     
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    GrafiTTied

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    thanks you all
    means a lot to me
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Brilliant!
     

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