This is one of the first songs I ever wrote and I happened to find it on another site, so i'm going to post it here. Bear with me here, this was written back in like 2001, so if it feels somewhat forced, that was why. "Commitment" Haven't you felt the way that I feel today Did you subside yourself to the fall Did you help me out with all of my problems While you were down the hall Always seeing how your god damn spirited It's kinda nice that you feel our passion It's kinda sweet that you felt my love again And rekindled it to cash in Our love again And you And me We both see the light With you With me Always through the night I see you You see me We love each other through night and day I love you You love me We know that we always act that way Talking about the way I act to you What problems do we have to make us scream About the way that I am That the way it just seems But I love you so dearly You bring my mind to a screeching halt When the hard times come to my mind again Your kind affection brings my ways back to default Bring me back to my orignial state of mind Where I feel no pain in my head Just take me and bring me back to normal Where I wish I wasn't dead Hold me tight, and never let me go Sleep with me again, and make me feel like...
besides some forced rhyme, the song is surprisingly good, definately if you wrote it way back in 2001. Maybe you could re-work it a touch, and make her great.