Cockpit

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by Arhaz, Sep 20, 2005.

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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    please help!!!!



    Cockpit


    Steering away from the mindless violence in my mind,
    Amongst all the smoke and fog, hope seems hard to find,
    The overlooking clouds of darkness remind me of sarcastic eyes,
    High up above, I’ve forgotten how to escape, falling into a bowl of lies.

    Within my cockpit I feel all safe, I feel free to steer away,
    And though my life runs on auto-you, I’ll try my best to fly today.

    Blocking out the sun, a cloud overshadows my flight,
    I try to think of the times straight ahead, I pretend to see light,
    But it all ends when I know that the sun has gone for its rest,
    And I am to fly in the dark, alone carrying you; I’m put to a teat.

    Within my cockpit I feel all safe, I feel free to steer away,
    And though my life runs on auto-you, I’ll try my best to fly today.

    And all my dreams fall crashing down, right into the sea of lies,
    When you try to fight over me, telling me to direct my way to die,
    And I am left helpless, though I try to live; you’ll control my life,
    So the last thing I do is fail for you, and I’ll take this final dive.



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    Ether

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    tis good so far.....how much more you want??
     
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    heshboy

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    Shut up freak. That was good, but if you know you can do better don't worry everyone gets that block once in a while.
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    thanks guys
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    Nice job freakolp, it wasn't your best work, but i can't say it's bad. Writers block really sucks, just keep writing and don't be to dissapointed with what comes out. Mabye take a short break from writing and listen to some music, get some inspiration. Wait for a really good idea to come to you before you write.
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    music seems to be the problem...it's the reason for my block. i can't think straight and focussed when a song's stuck in my head... :(


    thanks man ^_^
     

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