Blowing Kisses Into The Air

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    The Outsider

    The Outsider Billy Corgan = God

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    If you choose to love me,
    Thats quite okay.

    It's really upto you,
    Just until that fateful day.

    Sucker up to my stake,
    It's only my death calling late.

    All in my head, it isnt anymore,
    Saying it was, now it is on a slate.

    Paranoia and dreams wasted into,
    An empty drain.

    Wishing only wrongful beings,
    Wanted more that just the plain.

    Love and affection I was suppose to,
    Love and adore, forever.

    You only targetted me,
    Hoping for me to last this kiss until comes the never.

    A friend you were,to me through these years,
    Turned into blackened stone.

    Leave me to cry, with this farewell kiss,
    Drenched in my fears, shrivelling all alone.
     
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    Theazninvasion68

    Theazninvasion68 It's like blood to a vampire, our tragic desire. LPA Super VIP

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    I really like this poem, i'd publishize this poem if i were you!


    Top platimum-gold quality!
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    i felt there was some loss of rhytm at the end but this poem has seemed to evolved lyricly. It has a bit more depth to it than previous poems and i really like that.
     
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    Ether

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    Good effort....you have alot of talent
     
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    saunderitos

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    off topic,but lol at your sig david,everytime you vote, an emo stops crying lol
     
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    Stick N move

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    SO TRUE!
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Keep it up.
     

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