The world through my eyes...

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    Ether

    Ether Well-Known Member

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    The World...

    Colourful complexion set in perfection
    Monochromatic multi-tones on the inner section
    Kings and Queens that built the b-side
    Purified gangsters that always collide
    Two tone fast blast of musical brilliance
    Sky scraper sounds that lose our intelligence
    Platinum water that soothes the land
    Harmonic openings that cleanse the hand

    Arsenic views of interloping blues
    Dysfunctional rejects that read the daily news
    Global economics ripping up the streets
    Semi-uploading universal geeks
    Petrified leaders that reign our lives
    Dark masked culprits that cause their own demise
    Varnished politics laying down the law
    Troubled animals fleeing the war

    Narcissistic crystal that shatters on touch
    Ultimate armies that don’t do that much
    Field-sight fighters that walk a mile
    Girls and boys that never smile
    Bombs and guns that just cause pain
    Deadly tactics to play the game
    Deception leads to a rise in crime
    Perception causes a disjointed line

    Sympathetic sarcastic looks of love
    Everybody’s dying to the cry of a dove
    Multimedia projections only of the bad
    Every damn second seems to make me mad
    The human hand that constantly measures
    Emotional distress that smothers all your pleasures
    Selfish societies stating their impression
    Mythical mother nature teaching us a lesson.

    …The World
     
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    The Outsider

    The Outsider Billy Corgan = God

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    some very powerful images u create in this poem !!
     
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    saunderitos

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    f***ing awesome
     
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    Ether

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    Thanks you guys..... ^_^
     
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    Stick N move

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    it's a bit.. strange.. i like it..

    but it could have been done better i think..
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    I don't think you could have done better, it has a certain feel to it that is part of the poem, everyone could take it and make it seem better in their eyes, but that's not what poetry is about, it's trying to understand someone else through their words.

    Great write, it had an eerieness to it and great imagery. Nce work. B)
     
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    Ether

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    Thanks guys....

    True, david, it would not be 'through my eyes' if I was to change it...
     
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    heshboy

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    What's up Ether?

    Anyways this stuff is sick. I like it a lot ang give it a 100/10.

    You, saunderitos, and I should collab. It would be better than Linkin Park and Jay-Z fo sho.
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Real talent!
     
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    Ether

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    true dude.... we should mix our shit! LP, Jay-Z move over! lol....ill pm you we will sort sumfin out ;)

    Check Ya!

    P.S thanks for ya comments...they really help... :D
     

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