The Final Monsoon Goodbye

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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    The Final Monsoon Goodbye


    The lazy darkness caresses the threatening thunder,
    The cracking windows surrender to high pitched flashing wonder,
    As I huddle with you in the corner, awaiting midnight,
    Though the day has just begun, the first monsoon twilight.
    The roads outside on the city streets are wet yet complete,
    With the serenity of winds carrying the messages of lovers who never meet,
    The songs of the birds going unheard, the humans unhindered by this,
    You hold my palm within yours; cry as you see your name on my wrist.
    A sorrowful kiss comes falling upon my cheek moments after,
    My hands around your waist, seconds of immortal laughter,
    Then once more and for the last time comes another hug and humble kiss,
    And I long for it once more till today, a permanent prisoner of unforgettable bliss.




    very short compared to what i usually do.
    comments please.... ^_^
     
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    Stick N move

    Stick N move Well-Known Member

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    (w00t) (w00t) (w00t) (w00t) (w00t) (w00t)



    MASTERFUL!!


    11 out of 10!
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    This is awsome, i can already feel my ass getting kicked in the poetry comp. :lol:
     
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    heshboy

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    I liked it. Sometimes shorter is better, because the longer you try to make it the more you begin to force words. B)
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    you kiddin? the one i wrote for the poetry contest was so....ughh...you are way better david. believe me...... :eek: my exclamation mark on the keyboard doesn't work.... :eek: *bangs keyboard*

    thanks a lot people. much appretiated. ^_^
     
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    Ether

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    deep....very deep
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    you kiddin? the one i wrote for the poetry contest was so....ughh [/b][/quote]
    So is mine ;)
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Great.
     
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    Arhaz

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    thankie ^_^
     

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