Apart

I've had a great deal of writer's block for a while now. So this was quite forced. It's compiled from many different unfinished songs which I worked together, that's why you get quite a fragmented narrative which doesn't work in the grand scheme of things. I also nicked the first two lines from Ground Xero, to get me going. :whistle:



Apart

Stay here, watch the sunset,
Don't worry about the time,
Since the day we first met,
I knew that you'd be mine

But it fell apart,
And left me with a broken heart,
And it couldn't be,
But I still see you next to me,

I wanna find something,
That's worth living for,
I wanna have something,
I've never had before,

Thoughts are running through my head,
As i'm lying in my bed,
You said that this could never be,
But I see you lying next to me,

I wanna see something,
That's worth living for,
I wanna hold something,
I want something more,

And now you're gone the nights are long,
But I go on because i'm strong,
To find a place where I belong,
Hell, I can't always be wrong,

I wanna gain something,
That's worth living for,
I wanna do those things,
I could never do before,

 

your usual awesome writing feenix

 

It's great, but i've read some of your better stuff, and it just has that slight underlying forced feeling, i hate writters block, the best you can do is write through it. Last time i had writters block i wrote a poem about writers block, in an inderect way B) . It actually got me out of my writers block, or mabye it was just coinsidnece?

 

it's good...real good.loved the way you used few words in the greatest measure...made complete use of small phrases, in other words, Excellent

 

Thanks a lot, I apprechiate that very much

 

Well written.