Rigor Mortis **taboo**

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    saunderitos

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    Rigor Mortis


    [Rigor Mortis
    Stops my fun
    Rigor Mortis
    Broken bones when I'm done] Chorus

    Your body's cold,but so beautiful
    You don't move,so I just stare at you
    Stay with me,for richer for poor
    So I can touch you,forever more

    You're hard to move,I break your hips
    Your body's blue,just like your lips
    I move my body,with all feeling
    While your hard face,stares at the ceiling

    [] Chorus

    He takes the body,caresses it so
    The brittle body,heart so slow
    He feeds it milk through every hole
    Try's to give it life they stole

    His new 'lover' needs no skill
    Just there for primal thrill
    He's a freak and drinks to vile
    The psycho life,a necrofile


    A bit freaky i know,but i hope you like it


    *edited spelling
     
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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    It's good, but you made a few spelling mistakes :wth: Otherwise, I liked it... it's not as... taboo as your last one. Keep it up.

    Edit: Better now with the fixed spelling. Cheers. ^_^
     
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    saunderitos

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    thanks,i've sorted the spelling :p
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    Well it's been a while since i've read something from you and you have improved a lot, great job, torn rosed mentioned it wasn't as taboo as your last, so i might have to go check that one out.
     
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    saunderitos

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    I don't go into great detail in this,because i want the imagination to fill in what i left out :p
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Little mistakes but everything looks good.
     

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