This song I feel is great, I really love the chorus. Just tell me what you think; I just hope it’s not too weak. Thanks Sometimes I have these wrongful thoughts About something harmful I brought These thoughts are shrieking out of control, and Creeping in the back of my head I am feeling dead, Breaking my strength within Why can’t I dig deep inside and save myself from this sin? Falling down, all around, and hearing awful sounds, I have lost my smile But again my head feels like it’s about to explode I am tired of holding my nose So, Why can’t my mind just close? Because I am thinking so slow I just don’t know Here it goes (Chorus) These awful sounds I want them to quiet down (just quiet down) This awful noise I want it to quiet down (just quiet down) I know it's getting deeper every time Trying to close my mind My mind's trying to run away Now grasping but again turned astray I just want this noise to go away These cries are deep inside They just won’t step aside Bringing crazy thoughts of what I am not, are getting louder every time I am moving in slow motion, and still getting strange notions Inside my head today, my minds gone astray Why must I pay attention to all this noise that keeps me from being poised? I just want to shout out, and bring out all these chimes in mind they're bringing my insanity louder every time, I don’t want to cry, just to yell out what's on my mind Just one last time Here’s my cry (Chorus) These awful sounds I want them to quite down (just quite down) This awful noise I want it to quite down (just quite down) I know its' getting deeper every time Trying to close my mind My minds trying to run away Now grasping but again turned a stray I just want this noise to go away
This is good, but you've made a few spelling mistakes. Grr, it seems that all the comments I make remark on the spelling of the writers. Bugger. Never mind. Edit: Here are the mistakes; all minor, nothing serious. They're in bold. These awful sounds I want them to quite down (just quite down) (quiet) This awful noise I want it to quite down (just quite down) (quiet) I know it's getting deeper every time Trying to close my mind My minds trying to run away (mind's) Now grasping but again turned a stray (astray) I just want this noise to go away These cries are deep inside They just won’t step aside Bringing crazy thoughts of what I am not, are getting louder every time I am moving in slow motion, and still getting strange notions Inside my head today, my minds gone astray (mind's) Why must I pay attention to all this noise that keeps me from being poise? (poised?) I just want to shout out, and bring out all these chimes in mind Their (they're) bringing my insanity louder every time, I don’t want to cry, just to yell out wants on mind (what's on my mind?) Just one last time Here’s my cry