My Girlfriend Dumped Me Because I Talk Too Much

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    Dedicated

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    Okay, I wrote these lyrics last night and was wondering about them today. I decided I had no idea what to do with them next and was completely unsure about the flow, so I asked for the help of fellow lyric-writer David (known as D_A_V_I_D on here) and he helped me out so much. He edited and added in lyrics to the verses and final chorus. Thanks alot David :D

    "My Girlfriend Dumped Me Because I Talk Too Much"

    She broke down in tears,
    And said all these things,
    That she had kept hidden,
    From me all these years.

    She said,
    "You never let me get my point across," and I agree,
    She says I should listen to me.

    My girlfriend dumped me,
    Because I talk too much,
    I just don't shut up,
    And she'd just had enough.

    She broke down in tears,
    Looking ready to die,
    And said that I couldn't,
    Comfort all her fears.

    She said,
    "You never wanted to hold onto me, don't disagree,
    I don't think you have ever kissed me."

    My girlfriend dumped me,
    Because I talk too much,
    I just don't shut up,
    And she'd just had enough.
    "He never kissed me,
    Because he talked too much,
    We never even touched,
    And I'd just had enough."

    Was all the action,
    Lacking all compassion?
    Was it so hard for you,
    To relieve my talking?
    Was all the action,
    Lacking all compassion?
    Was it so hard for you?

    My girlfriend dumped me,
    Because I talk too much,
    I just don't shut up,
    And she'd just had enough.

    "She never kissed me,
    Because she didn't talk enough,
    Our hearts never even touched,
    If there's no talking,
    Then there's not much."
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    Awsome you pollished it off beautifully, great job. ;)
    This verse truned out great:

    Awsome write ;)
     
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    Luke

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    Great work Dave and David.You 2 should make a tag team,you could call it The Double Dave Connection :lol:

    Or here's an idea,since I've worked on lyrics with Dave (Dedicated) and I admire alot of work by D_A_V_I_D we should make a team,the Flame-Dave Connection :lol:

    Good work :)
     
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    LOL :lol:
     
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    LMFAO XD


    Glad you like the lyrics xD
     
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    Great work you two. And I support the Double Dave and Flame-Dave Connections :lol:
     
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    :lol:


    Thanks for the comment :D
     
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    This is really great lyrics. I really enjoyed them. :lol:
     
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    Good lyrics
     
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    Thankies :)
     

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