The wizard

The Wizard

The wizard’s standing on the mountain
Drinking from the life fountain
He ticks away the years I’m counting
But doesn’t hear the people shouting

[Will you save me Wizard?
Cause I can hear the blizzard
Save me from my sure damnation
Because You are my fixation] chorus

I touch my fragmented skin
The wizard breaking from within
I keep his love ‘cause I love him
But his violence wears me thin

[] Chorus

His moan echo’s in my mind
I’m scared but he says it’s fine
He grab’s his when I grab mine
Still I see his forehead shine

(Don’t leave me wizard
I love you so
I’ll never do anything
To make you go) Bridge

[] Chorus

He tells me and I obey
Too afraid he’ll go away
I hate this part ,but still
Hate it more when he looks ill/So

[] Chorus



I'm sorry if it looks like im spamming,but i've had alot of inspiration and really want to know what people think of my work


I'll let you draw your own conclusions on what this song is about.It kinda changed half way through for me,i wasn't too sure.




I'm writing a new song,I'm not sure whether to call it Vyktor or unknown helsinki.What do you guys reckon?

 

I had "The Wizard Song" in my head all the way through reading that lol.
And as I said on msn, this line "He grab’s his when I grab mine"... kinda disturbs me.

Anyway, great song. I love the rhyming. And I like the final stanza which changes rhythm.

And I just read through it again... it gets more and more disturbing every time.

 

thanks feenix,i'm glad it disturbs you thats what most of my songs like this are written for

 

lol, yeh that line is dead freaky....

i think you refer to the POPE...i had him in my head when i read th poem.

good job!

 

LoL,yes,the pope :|

 

do i get candy for guessin right and appreciating?

 

yes

we all have sweets

but you can have cyber sweets for appreciating

 

Gawd, You have some major talent, gawd u sound sooo hawt

 

thankyou

but i don't want comments on what you want me to be ^^ just my writing please.

 

i'm sorry
....but it's just plastic...it's a prop at a halloween vampire store, but if it really disturbs you inspite of all that, please PM me....


for the poem, i was just thinking, like really strong thinking. how about having some slaves for this wizard and a story in poetry form to it. it would be good.

 

that line may disturb you, but i bet ben likes it, dont you ben

good poem

not your best, but still good

 

LoL,thanks ben