The tree’s Take me through the tree’s So we can hear the seven sea’s My hands are rotten and cold But are there for you to hold You give me purpose in my life Will you be my loving wife? You create a lullaby From the sounds of city high [I feel so good Better than I though I could You keep me alive When for life I thought I’d strive] Chorus From love derives obstruction And after that onto dysfunction Love is such a deadly feeling Leaves me hanging off the ceiling Life seems like a dream So sweet, yet served with cream Look at me, now behold My hands are no longer cold [] Chorus You make me laugh With your witchcraft It seems like a finale But we’ve started hardly If I express my feelings to you Explain that my love is true, and You give me purpose in my life Will you be my loving wife? [] Chorus i hope someone likes it
Nice rhythm and flow, but it seems like you're really stretching for rhymes in certain places. Keep working, this shows a lot of promise.
LoL,yeh i felt that i had to ryhme it ^^ im compelled to everytime i write a song,its a bitch sometimes
I like the rhyme, Was this song wrote about anyone special it seems to be. If soo thats sooo cute, I would love someone to write a song about me