angels and demons

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    fallenangel

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    fallenangel, Aug 4, 2005



    Angels and demons

    To call upon the angels that serve God
    To gather up strength just to survive
    I give thee my undying devotion
    If only an angel would present itself to me

    A candle I burn in prayer for deliverance
    Of all my evil sins from my past
    Forgive me the pleasure of the flesh
    And let me love if only just once more

    But as the flames of the candles flicker
    All the evil that is brewing inside of me
    Piercing deep within my very soul
    I look deep into the wick and see

    There above me stands an angel
    Not white, amazing and brilliant
    But black and beautiful and belonging
    Giving me his hand and presenting himself to me

    God will give you no such salvation, he says
    But only the deliverance of much pain
    Come with me and I will show you love
    Come now and devote yourself only to me

    So taking his hand, he takes me into himself
    Wrapping me deep inside with the sensation of floating
    I collapse into his chest and close my eyes
    Blood rushing, I hear it sing as I am taken

    Away to hell as I have been temped
    Never should you call upon an angel
    For only God commands the white, winged ones
    And for my summoning I will now be punished
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    D_A_V_I_D, Aug 4, 2005



    I only felt the last line inturrupted the flow of the poem but other than that it was AWSOME....
    Just another great write, i like the idea behind the dark angel really good, shows creativity. NICE WORK.
     
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    El Muerto

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    El Muerto, Aug 5, 2005



    i think i'm just gonna quote myself on this one

    definitely No1 now
     
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    arT saveS

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    arT saveS, Aug 5, 2005



    Damn. This is fucking good, and correct me if I'm wrong, but the black angel is satan, yes? Anyway, I loved it. Well done.
     
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    fallenangel

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    fallenangel, Aug 6, 2005



    thanks david! yes i have to agree with you on the last line but writing this poem was the wierdest thing ever!

    i was just surfing the net when i suddenly started to write and before i knew it i had 6 stanzas written so i had to try and finish it or i would have kept on going!!! so maybe that's why it seems alittle forced?

    ah dusan, i feel so touched but really glad you that you enjoy my work so! i blush everytime i read a reply from you!

    arT saveS, you got it in one! yes it is satan coming to punish one who calls an angel cause you are supposed to only call on God, apparently...

    so glad you guy like it! me have a happy face now! :D
     

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