My Child

Something new, a weird sort of lay our but i like it. Hope you like it too.

My Child

Little child,
Come into my arms,
Let me abuse you,
And do you harm,
Come little child,
Be at peace,
And let me gag you,
In your sleep,
Watch little child,
Watch the bunny hop,
Into my trap,
Where I’ll slit its throat,
Walk little child,
Into a world,
Where you’re already dead,
Just there to watch it unfurl.

(You’re already dead)
Go my child.
(Walk to your death)
Run my child.
(Open your eyes)
Breathe my child.
(Look at your world)
Weep my child.

Now come back to me,
My little child,
Undo your birth,
My only child,
Undo the harm,
Which was done onto you,
Come back to me,
Or I’ll run to you.
Back into the womb,
I’ll force you there,
For your protection,
I did this all in you care,
Leave once again,
But walk the other way,
Go back to the angels,
The price is mine to pay.

(I gave you life)
Stay my child.
(Go the other way)
Don’t run away, my child.
(I’ll pay the price)
Don’t breathe, my child.
(I shed this blood for you)
Please don’t weep, my child.

 

wow, different!

really don't know how i feel about this one cause it's abit twisted. but i guess that's what your going for.

i think i like it...it's hard to describe how i really feel about it but the structure and rhythm is really good.

so over all, it's a good poem but strange and twisted. it's a great write actually!

 

Thanks fallenangel, i asked another friend what they thought of it and they said it was quite twisted aswell.
Glad you liked it, hope everyone understands the story behind it. It's actually quite sad.

 

D_A_V_I_D, it's been a while

anyway, I'm just speechless, this one's a really really deep poem. Also quite sad in my opinion. I'll always admire how easy it is for you to make a rhyming poem so true, so meaningful and powerful. God, I'm just in love with your work. Very nice david, keep it up!!


P.S: please remember I'll get a free copy of your work if anything ever gets published, you promised me.

thank you

 

awesome,i loved it

i'm a big fan a taboo subject poems and songs,i think this was written very well

 

Thanks souderitos and thanks SD.

I havn't forgoten that i owe you a free copy,
Thankyou everyone for your feedback glad people seem to like it.

 

it..it's...it's beautiful...BEAUTIFUL!

 

Like I said, very dark. I like it a lot though. Good job, David.

 

Thanks freakolp and arT saveS.

There is something about this poem that i really like for some reason. Every time i read it, it brings a tear to my eye. Thanks everyone for all the encouragement in this poem, and in everything else i've written.