Long Way Home

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    Feenix

    Feenix Well I Do

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    There's a few spots in here where the rhythm gets messed up and that really annoys me. But I hope you enjoy it anyway. I'm open to constructive criticism, so please feel free to do so.



    Long Way Home

    I'm on this long road on my own,
    Looking for some place to call home,
    I close my eyes and see your smile,
    Now I could walk a thousand miles,

    No I don't know what i'll find,
    But i've got you on my mind,
    All of those times we shared together,
    I wanna hold you in my arms forever,

    Seeing all of those stars up in the sky,
    Thinking back to when I held you when you cried,
    Wish I could see you this cold night,
    My ray of hope, my shining light,

    All of the love, all of the tears,
    I'll fight away all of your fears,
    Far away but i'll see you soon,
    I whisper, staring at the moon,

    It's a long road but it leads home,
    I can't stand another moment alone,
    I need you to show me how to live,
    In return, my heart to you I give

    And no I don't know what i'll find,
    But girl i've got you on my mind,
    All of those times we shared together,
    I wanna hold you in my arms forever,

    When I get back girl,
    I'll hold you in my arms forever,
     
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    Luke

    Luke Mind Your Manners. LPA Addicted VIP

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    I really fucking like this.This has shown great talent,well done :)
     
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    saunderitos

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    this rocks ,yet again ^^
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Awsome!
     
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    fallenangel

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    i like this. it flowed really well but i have to say that i felt the rhyming was alittle too forced.

    but other than that, i thought it was good.
     

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