I wrote this song from inspiration of the recent terrrorist attacks on London. Start with a small rumbling, growing louder then and explosion What’s going on?? Terrorist bomb?? Something’s wrong People stare Its mister Blair He doesn’t care Condolences seen on TV He doesn’t give a damn about me Why he’s careless I don’t see People have died For which I have cried They should have survived Said I’m sorry to everyone They think I do it for fun I do care they lost their son In streets people stare Just because I’m Mister Blair really I do care People will die in my name Give my comrades fame People burning in my flame I do it for my pulsing hate I do have stable mental state Kill these men I cannot wait This all makes sense to me Make my religion free! If not, pay the fee. I wrote this song to include three points of view,the first,is the victim The second is Mr.Blair and the third is the terrorist I am trying to help people see that they cannot see and/or understand the reasons behind others action.The world is not perfect.Things will go wrong,however we must live with it,and try not to find fault in everything. I hope you enjoy this song,and that it helps you understand the many points of view in this vast earth
thanks for being honest i find i cant always trust everyones "its good" comments,i dont think everyone could like my writing
frankly..it's very flat, but i love the way you've been very diplomatic and given equal power to the view points of the three categories of people who have been effected...now, that's hard to do!... it's more a prose-poem...a very ood attempt though!
thanks for your input guys,i wrote it more as a way to help people see different points of view,rather than lyrical greatness ^^ but thanks again
I have to agree, i havn't seen anything completely amazing by you but your writing has been quite good, but this i have to say it was a flop, it felt like some very ametuer rapper was singing it in my head to words off the top of their head, i didn't feel any passion from it, as freakolp said, it was very flat, Hey but not everything you write is going to be great, i'm sure your next piece will be better. Don't give up because of this.
i thought this last bit has potential. but other than that, i have to agree with the others. however, it's very brave of you to right about something so sensitive and i think you should try again with this subject matter. if it's written in the right way, it can become a very powerful piece of writing. keep at it cause i can see potential in you to be a real fab writer!